Far away

Far away

A Poem by Kuldeep desai

    
I am at the place from you far away
how much do i miss how could i say
To achieve the miles i came far 
to this Stream.
Now returning Back has become mine
One and Only Dream.
It's a quiet and peaceful place 
but from you miles far away

Days are going like an centipede
Without you here.
Always brings joy reading your letter
You have already learnt cooking While i am here
And even you have joined in The Choir
It's a dark and shiny place
but from you miles far away

Distance doesn't make us apart
 I can still feel your breath
You have left no space in my heart 
this feeling can never see death
It's cold and chilled place 
but from you miles far away

© 2016 Kuldeep desai


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I liked this a lot! I loved reading it. I did feel the longing that everyone below me marked. I have never experienced this feeling, but your poem gave me a look into it. Thanks for sharing.

Posted 6 Years Ago


i hate that longing ,that distance when you just want to connect. nice work.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Kuldeep desai

7 Years Ago

Thank you for reading it.......
beautiful,longing poem of love
liked the repeating line

Posted 7 Years Ago


Kuldeep desai

7 Years Ago

thank you for reading it and its so nice of you to read my all works thank you for being kind.......
Another great poem! The last stanza is powerful and has a wonderful tone.

Well done

Posted 7 Years Ago


Kuldeep desai

7 Years Ago

Thank you......
Great poem!!
Keep it up!!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Kuldeep desai

7 Years Ago

Thank you........
Thanks for sharing such a beautiful poem...I enjoyed reading this poem of yous as always... keep on sharing :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


Kuldeep desai

7 Years Ago

i am glad that you have liked it........:) :) :).........
Powerful and good words for love.
"Distance doesn't make us apart
I can still feel your breath
You have left no space in my heart
this feeling can never see death
It's cold and chilled place
but from you miles far away"
Real love hold on, even with great distance. I like the above lines a lot. People, we have loved. Are always a part of us. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote



Posted 7 Years Ago


Kuldeep desai

7 Years Ago

Thank you once again...........
Coyote Poetry

7 Years Ago

You are welcome.
Can feel the pain and the longing in this one.. you try to enjoy where you are, while missing the one who is far away.. it is moving.. nicely done..

few things I noticed...

"how much do i miss (you) i can't say"... I would also capitalize the "i's" here.

"It's a quite and peaceful place "... did you mean "quiet" instead of "quite?"



Posted 9 Years Ago


Kuldeep desai

9 Years Ago

Can please tell me Why i need to capitalize 'is'?.......
AprilRN1210

9 Years Ago

not is.. your i 's... some you have as I.. and some you have as just i...

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Added on November 17, 2014
Last Updated on May 4, 2016
Tags: Love, Romance, Leave, Far, Beauty, Lover, Missing

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Kuldeep desai
Kuldeep desai

Bengaluru, India



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