The last letter

A Poem by Kuldeep desai

In memory of her

Writing a letter on the ridge of a mountain

Frozen hand shivering even to hold the pen

Cold breeze, infinite thoughts mind is at stake

But still writing just for your sake

Emptiness is so desperate to give me no words

Surrounded by air of melancholy that’s absurd

Still found and wrote the lines from then to now

Need to say goodbye, but don’t know how

Wind blew so hard letters flew far apart

And I had to write everything from the start

There’s a groom waiting for you, grin and agile

Flowers everywhere you walked down the aisle

Seeing you like an angel, realized my big Mistake

This rain of pain is going to stop, I am about

finish this letter

Tear it into pieces after reading once

when the letter is open

Coz whatever I had given to you with love is

always meant to be broken…………….

© 2016 Kuldeep desai

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red93

Really excellent work and nice use of the mountain related imagery.

Posted 3 Years Ago

barleygirl

To be honest, I'm not a fan of heartbreak poems becuz it's often a blame game of predictable sentiments. That's why I LOVE your heartbreak poem becuz it's fresh & original & you use the surroundings (jagged & steep) as a symbol for how this feels to the guy, how it feels to have your pages scattered by the wind -- strong relatable imagery! I would suggest line 9, using "pages" instead of "letters" . . . this guy is writing one letter that's made up of pages or sheets of paper, that's what's blowing away. I also love how you show us why the two are separated, but the narrator isn't getting into the blame game, just saying he blew it! The honest, balanced, deeply-felt response of REGRET! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 4 Years Ago

3 Years Ago

Thank you very much for the review and feedback....i am glad that you liked it...

Arshia

This is such a touching poem which wonderfully expresses the melancholy and pain which the heartbroken boy feels. An amazing write! :)

Posted 6 Years Ago

6 Years Ago

Hi it's been so long I still remember writing an poem with you about friendship... I am happy to see.. read more

boygene borice

such a touch letter. i felt every word

Posted 6 Years Ago

Kathryn Smith

oh my goodness I want to bawl my eyes out! ..but theres something about being on a mountain and writing..I wish I could do that!

Posted 7 Years Ago

7 Years Ago

writing in between closed walls and writing in open fresh air has large differences.....an open air .. read more

KeeD

I like how you penned a story through poetry, very vivid. It took me on a journey of emotion from empathy to concern..I drifted further into the words and got consumed by pain and regret. Love certainly seems like a tug o'war!

Posted 7 Years Ago

7 Years Ago

yeah you are right my friend...Love is certainly a tug of war either you have to pull hard to keep e.. read more

Jddcbjiuh

Very sad poem, but heartfelt and with much emotion. A very good piece here, and great lines "Wind blew so hard letters flew far apart
And I had to write everything from the start" loved it.

Posted 7 Years Ago

7 Years Ago

thank you for reading it.........i am glad you have liked it.......

andrew mitchell

grief and sadness here but the tearing of the letter is a first start to healing, letting go.

Posted 7 Years Ago

7 Years Ago

thank you for reading.....

Luna

The last line was soooooo beautiful. To think such a beautiful letter written than teared to shreds. A waste isn't it but even so at least we try to love cause that's all we can do .The poem might be sad but still it's beautiful. Nice poem there Kuldeep keep writing your heart out :)