The last letter

The last letter

A Poem by Kuldeep desai
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In memory of her

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Writing a letter on the ridge of a mountain

Frozen hand shivering even to hold the pen

Cold breeze, infinite thoughts mind is at stake

But still writing just for your sake

 

Emptiness is so desperate to give me no words

Surrounded by air of melancholy that’s absurd

Still found and wrote the lines from then to now

Need to say goodbye, but don’t know how

Wind blew so hard letters flew far apart

And I had to write everything from the start

 

There’s a groom waiting for you, grin and agile

Flowers everywhere you walked down the aisle

Seeing you like an angel, realized my big Mistake

This rain of pain is going to stop, I am about

finish this letter

Tear it into pieces after reading once

when the letter is open

Coz whatever I had given to you with love is

always meant to be broken…………….

 

 

 

 

 

 

    


© 2016 Kuldeep desai



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oh my goodness I want to bawl my eyes out! ..but theres something about being on a mountain and writing..I wish I could do that!

Posted 10 Months Ago


Kuldeep desai

10 Months Ago

writing in between closed walls and writing in open fresh air has large differences.....an open air .. read more
I like how you penned a story through poetry, very vivid. It took me on a journey of emotion from empathy to concern..I drifted further into the words and got consumed by pain and regret. Love certainly seems like a tug o'war!

Posted 11 Months Ago


Kuldeep desai

11 Months Ago

yeah you are right my friend...Love is certainly a tug of war either you have to pull hard to keep e.. read more
Very sad poem, but heartfelt and with much emotion. A very good piece here, and great lines "Wind blew so hard letters flew far apart
And I had to write everything from the start" loved it.

Posted 11 Months Ago


Kuldeep desai

11 Months Ago

thank you for reading it.........i am glad you have liked it.......
grief and sadness here but the tearing of the letter is a first start to healing, letting go.

Posted 11 Months Ago


Kuldeep desai

11 Months Ago

thank you for reading.....
The last line was soooooo beautiful. To think such a beautiful letter written than teared to shreds. A waste isn't it but even so at least we try to love cause that's all we can do .The poem might be sad but still it's beautiful. Nice poem there Kuldeep keep writing your heart out :)

Posted 11 Months Ago


Kuldeep desai

11 Months Ago

this review is more beautiful than my poem.......thank you for loads of sweet words.......Wish you h.. read more
Luna

11 Months Ago

Haha that's nice of you to say :) . But I meant it beautiful poems are only written by beautiful hea.. read more
This is pain,pain in shades.

Posted 11 Months Ago


Kuldeep desai

11 Months Ago

pain in shades...yeah there is a comparative darkness in that pain......
I love the meaning of this!
Keep on writing!!

Posted 11 Months Ago


Kuldeep desai

11 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and encouragement.....
There are a million, "I've lost you and I'm so sad," poems, all lamenting someone unknown who left for unknown reasons. The words change, but the event is always the same: My baby left me and I'm feeling sad.

High school lit mags are filled with such poems, written by teen aged girls recovering from a first love. So many they've been given the name, Dismal Damsel Poems.

That's not to say that they can't be well written, just that there are so many of them that it's impossible to be unique. If you look around, here, you'll see that they're probably more than half of what's posted.

But the biggest problem with them is that they are a listing of how much suffering someone we know nothing about has felt. But face it. For all we know the one who left was driven to do so by the behavior of the one lamenting the loss. After all, we know nothing about either of them, or what led to them coming together or ending, or even how long they were together. So while the one writing is deep in emotion, how can the reader, who has only a list of how sad the speaker is, neither relate nor understand. They came to you to be moved, emotionally, and you told them how YOU feel.

Instead, why not make them feel the loss?

I wish I had better news. But to better show the kind of thing the poem reminded me of, here's a link to the singing group Davinci's Notebook's song, The Title of the Song. It's sly, funny, and one of my favorites.

In the song, the group presents a template for creating a generic love song. In it, they tell you what information to place in the various spots, just as the people writing this kind of poem adhere to their own placement formula.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=281ax7Ovlsg

Posted 11 Months Ago


Kuldeep desai

11 Months Ago

The one thing i noticed from your couple of review you pointed on the point of narration reader shou.. read more
JayG

11 Months Ago

• .that feeling is what gives you the words which are buried deep inside your heart

.. read more
Hearbreak is so cruel especially for a true and sincere lover. But hearbreak is an integral part of every love story whatever its culmination. Its pathos is vital to the thrumming of the human heart and soul. Great depiction of sorrow in love. I appreciate this poem very much Kuldeep.

Posted 11 Months Ago


Kuldeep desai

11 Months Ago

yeah nowadays heartbreak is common in every love story........and sad part is it will be cruel to ei.. read more
Honest words in the letter.
"Emptiness is so desperate to give me no words
Surrounded by air of melancholy that’s absurd
Still found and wrote the lines from then to now
Need to say goodbye, but don’t know how
Wind blew so hard letters flew far apart
And I had to write everything from the start"
The above lines. True and so hard to say goodbye. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 11 Months Ago


Kuldeep desai

11 Months Ago

I don't know how many times i have said thanks to you for reading cause that many times you were gra.. read more
Coyote Poetry

11 Months Ago

You are very kind and I love your work. You are welcome.

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