One Voice

One Voice

A Poem by laceyjane23
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sometimes it only takes one voice to make a change.

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Standing in the hallway..
talking with your friends.
Reminicing about parties...
and the latest fashion trends.
 
A girl walks by...
and the tongue lashing begins.
Enjoying the attention they get...
when they shout those harmful things.
 
Insults shouted about her hair...
right down to her shoes.
everyone begins to laugh...
at the brutal things they do.
 
They are all proud...
of the hurtful things they've done.
All continue to laugh...
all except for one.
 
The verbal bashing rolls on...
as the tears begin to drop.
until that one steps forward...
and shouts for them to stop!
 
 

© 2008 laceyjane23



Author's Note

laceyjane23
please ignore all grammar and punctuation errors, we as a society need to realize that we are all made different, and that even the littlest insults said can be the sharpest ones received. its time for to step up and be the one voice!

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Hello laceyjane.

I never comment on grammar and punctuation errors; such errors are for the writer to edit and I don't believe they need to be pointed out. This is an interesting poem. I enjoyed reading it. It does tend to have a lot of telling as opposed to showing, but it shows a lot of promise.

Gray

Posted 9 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.




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Lacey, this is an amazing piece. It really does show how much one person, one voice can really change everything. I have been on all three sides of your poem before so it spoke to me quite a bit. I have been the girl that everyone picked on because she was to meek to say anything. I have been the girl who transferd to a new school and in order to fit in started to make fun of someone else before it could happen to me again, and I have also been the person in the crowd watching and remember what it felt like to be the other one and finally stand up to everyone else. This is a great piece of work and you are a great writer. Please keep up the great work. I look forward to reading more from you.

Blessed be,
Riley

Posted 9 Years Ago


Great poem, great message.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I agree with you completely. How sad but true that this is what the world has come to.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very well said, indeed. Ive been picked on all my life...about everything. Even at home i dont get any respect lol. The imagery i liked as well. It shows that behind all the joking, insults and playing games, there is a one true soul much bigger and better to save the day and erase those hurtful things that were said. Awesome job with this!

B.A.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow, what can I say, really?

Well, first of all, great poem! The storyline was simple, yet it's slightly complex, depending who's reading it. It really makes you think: What's this gonna do to the kid? If the voice belonged to a teacher, would it make the child feel worse? The questions are endless!

Second of all, this is a great example of how the ticking time-bomb starts. It sucks that kids, my age especially, think that high school is their entire life! But that one voice is really all a kid needs to hear. ;)

Ironically Yours, Blade and Blood

Posted 9 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Very nicely written, I like poems that try to enlighten, we live in dark times with all the war, crime and such that anything written to give hope is a blessing. Nicely written work.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You rock! I am so glad you decided to be the one voice today! This kicks a*s! Good job!

Posted 9 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

This is so well done. Your talent really comes through on this piece. I truely enjoyed it.

Posted 9 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

This is a simple, inspirational piece that conveys the harmflul effects of bullying - and how easy it is to stop. (: Nice job!

Posted 9 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

Hello laceyjane.

I never comment on grammar and punctuation errors; such errors are for the writer to edit and I don't believe they need to be pointed out. This is an interesting poem. I enjoyed reading it. It does tend to have a lot of telling as opposed to showing, but it shows a lot of promise.

Gray

Posted 9 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.


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Well lets see, I am 28 yrs old, and i love to write. I write poetry, lyrics, stories, articles, and I am currently working on my first book, and it has been quite an experience! I love life and I beli.. more..

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