Exposed

Exposed

A Poem by J.M. Barrett
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Excerpt courtesy of "I Am the Walrus" from the Beatles.

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When all the world sees that your social justice cause

 is built on propaganda to gain public applause

 and all your good will deeds, are just marketing schemes

When all the world sees

 maybe...


When all the world wakes up from their mundane daily routines

 and pride in empty consumerism, wrapped in the American Dream

 their all-for-one posture, their embellished identities

When all the world wakes up, maybe the world will see


Maybe the world will see, that it's not the place it seems

 they are not who they thought they were, things are not what they believed

There's an agenda to acquire more than which you need

 while maintaining the reputation of Ms. and Mr. Charity


When all the world sees the person they pretend to be,

 the person who they really are, and how they want to seem

The person standing next to them, the widow across the street,

 the starving child in the third world country crouching at their knees...


When all the world sees that we are vultures out of habit

 slaughters to the lamb, and leeches to the planet

 built on exploitation, to build a "better nation"

When all the world sees

 maybe...


When all the world sees we're interdependently connected

 and underneath we're all the same, when looking past complexions 

Our concern for personal gain has caused a lack to love each other

When will the world see, sacrifice takes some discomfort


When all the world wakes up and when the world sees

 that: "I am she as you are he and you are me and we

 are all together,"

 maybe the world can be...


© 2011 J.M. Barrett



Author's Note

J.M. Barrett
I edited the bottom portion somewhat, but I still feel like there is something more I can do to tie it all up. Any suggestions welcome! :]

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"Our concern for personal gain has caused a lack to love each other
When will the world see, sacrifice takes some discomfort"

I love this piece! :) Maybe you can end it with "maybe the world can be
in unity." :) Keep writing! :)


Posted 3 Months Ago


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Dan
love it. Suggest last line "maybe we can let it be". Ties in with the Bealtes ending and sews up the meaning nicely? Meh..........maybe......

Great work x

Posted 7 Years Ago


Yeah, the ending may need a little work, but this poem is very deep, very well put together. Good!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Beatles FTW!!!!!!

....anyways.

I love this poem, it had a raw sense of power in it, one that is very rare in poems today. Nice work.

Tophatgirl

Posted 7 Years Ago


I really like this! When all the world wakes up and when the world sees

that: "I am she as you are he and you are me and we

are all together,"

maybe the world can be...

Yes, i agree well expressed are you views which i tend to agree with!

Chloe

Posted 7 Years Ago


Nice expression of your views on social justice. Cool use of the Beatles. I think the ending is just fine:)

Posted 7 Years Ago


Your expression and raw emotion in this really blow me away. Tragic, although totally honest. Very well done :D

Posted 7 Years Ago


I love your spirit in this Jackie. Very wonderfully done, thanks for sharing it with us.

Antonio xx


Posted 7 Years Ago


Now I liked this it is so real and wonderful.
Very well written

Posted 7 Years Ago


I love this poem and that song. Nice work :)

Posted 7 Years Ago



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