Nails

Nails

A Poem by Tai Ryens
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Dancing on nails~

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Hurling darts towards adolescent maps;

starting quests that evaporate into thin air like steam:

ambitions fading to oblivion as a match

drifting among lifeless stars were his dreams.


{Skimming in darkness seemed as a coincidence;

for he refused to believe evil thrived in his soul:

little did he know the devil planned the incident;

scheming to swipe every bit of the plunder he stole}


Dragging along shells made every step even harder;

anchoring a guilty conscience to every stop in the paper trail:

squinting towards a finish that continuously gets farther;

only to glance down and see terrified faces in every nail.



© 2012 Tai Ryens



Author's Note

Tai Ryens
Not sure if I pulled this off well . . . Let me know what you think?
Photo courtesy of neos86 on Deviant Art

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You have such a good vocabulary :) I wish I had a mouth like you...

Posted 5 Years Ago


Tai Ryens

5 Years Ago

And you will, one day, so long as you strive for it with all your worth and pursue it.
C.A. Lucas

5 Years Ago

Thank you :)
I like this one. The first Stanza's pretty f**k cool.

Posted 5 Years Ago


I think you pulled this off. So much, to consider here. And there's a
sadness to this journey, very palatable. I like the way you squeezed,
sandwiched between the two vivid scenes an explanation––––through
narration. Thought provoking Tai. Well written.

Posted 5 Years Ago


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Alm
I'd say you did pull it off well. I feel I'm like being sucked into the poem, and feel the horror just as the character does. 'Tis awesome, Ryan.

-Alm

Posted 5 Years Ago


Great rhythm! I really liked it! 100/100 :)

Posted 5 Years Ago



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Added on August 25, 2012
Last Updated on August 25, 2012
Tags: ambition, dark, dream

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Tai Ryens
Tai Ryens

Bay Area, CA



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