Mime of Love

Oh, how I can stand the mime of lust, but not the strike from the mime of love.

Oh, my dear, daring old lover,

sown by you were the seeds of lust,

of which blossomed fingers ascending my spine,

and mumbled merriments of disgust

held by your hand was the torch that set us ablaze,

I accustomed, in truth embraced the devilish pattern

of exchanging flirts day by day,

and mimicking love beneath Lilith's lantern

yet we both are destined to fall and burn

by the flames of imitated glee,

but you turned to flee and from me discerned

until I held my darling mime,

one last time,

and damned her to ashen with me

Author's Note

Lilith; whom I often refer as the goddess of lust in Christianology, was a major inspiration for this; along with the concept of a mime. Just thought I'd toss that out of the basket.
Photo courtesy of orellanam of Deviant Art.

Reviews

[Bluefire]

Lillith, along with a mime, what a dark yet beautiful combination! I love the way this played out in my head, especially the end.
Very well done! ^-^

[Tai Ryens]

Thank you, Blue, always a pleasure to see your thoughts.

[Bluefire]

No problem. ^^

[Craba]

very deep and powerful, you have talent

[That_Guy]

Amazing diction. Powerful write. I enjoyed your use of Lilith as well, an educated and versed writer no doubt. Great job

[Dark Tower]

That is an incredible write. Well done Tai, truly inspiring.

[That_Girl]

Jesus... you're 14? That's insane...

I love the way you present such conflicting emotions. It's quite the thrill ride, I must say. You have a talent that many will never possess. Well done.

How can I not subscribe after reading this?

[Tai Ryens]

As one of my favorite quotes goes: 'with great power comes great responsibility;' which goes double for talents. Often do I see talent coupled with flaws; and I am plagued by it day by day.

[Baby Ricochet]

"and mimicking love beneath Lilith's lantern" Love that line. Another classic Tai poem. I've often refured to a lilith like diety as "The W***e Goddess of Animal Instinct" at play in the spiritual realm of some of my sexcapades in the real world. Basically she's the sexual demention of Aphrodite before the Christians made her "pure." Tai my lad, you are the poet laureate

[Caradoc]

Such a terrible torment that resides within the lines of this poem.

The narrator knows this person, this other, and though the two share lust and desire with each other, there is a darkness. It's an interesting tale, he, the speaker locked in a sick affair with a whom that both brings out his desire yet at the same time disgusts him. And the way it is described, I get the feeling that he is trapped, forced to "mimic" what a real healthy relationship would be, but with this woman, whom he does not love. In following that, as the last stanza conveys, he knows that it is doomed to end horribly, in flames. Even as she runs away, to survive and find another in which to play "her game", he captures her, making sure she burns with him, whether out of spite, twisted passion, or to spare others, is unsure.

What a dark tale you here. I like it very much. It reminds me, in parts, of certain stories I have read or thought of in my mind.

I love the mention of Lilith too, by the way. She has very ancient origins and a good number of legends and epithets.

Well done my friend.

-Caradoc

[Tai Ryens]

Ah, you've captured the essence of this poem well. As for the motive to holding her; I shall leave for you to decide. Thank you for such a well thought-out review.

[Caradoc]

You're most welcome. It was an enjoyable read.