Autumn Blaze

Somewhere,
deep in the forest
beneath the autumn blaze
of a maple tree,
I hear your name in Nature’s breath
as it whistles
through the fiery leaves
that bristle with nostalgia
for the taste of summer,
and the sweet taste of spring
somewhere over yonder,
where the air doesn’t taste
like it could smother a poor soul
with nowhere left to go

You’ve done it,
you’ve invaded the places
I’ve never taken you to,
the places where I go to think
and all I hear is you you you,
and I swear
if one day you vanish,
you’ll take the sun with you,
and all I’d have left
is the whistle of the breeze
that carries your name
to haunt my every dream

And I swear,
if one day you vanish,
this whistle of the breeze
that carries your name
will choke me in my sleep.

Reviews

[ROSALIND]

Beautiful enchanting deep inspiring

[BlakeAshton]

Fantastic use of imagery throughout. I am also partial to the lack of punctuation used properly in poetry and this is a spot on job!

[DayDreamer1292]

Gorgeous work! I love the imagery of this poem!

[Nyanachi]

"I hear your name in Nature’s breath" simply so beautiful, this piece glistens with imagery. Its an effective piece that's well put together. I really enjoy your connections between the human soul and nature itself.

[Tai Ryens]

Ha! I do love to play around with metaphors like that. Thanks for your thoguhts.

[Bluefire]

Amazing, very vivid and beautiful with a dark twist.
Well done, this might be one of my favorites of yours. ^^

[Tai Ryens]

Ah, I'm flattered. Thank you very much ^^

[Bluefire]

No problem =3

[Emily]

I line how it make it seem like your telling a story at first!
Well done!
Keep it up!!

[Tai Ryens]

Thank you for stopping by, Emily.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

can't get rid of the memory of her, and at the same time don't want to...
she will vanish one day from our mind...and our mind will choke on the loss.

[Tai Ryens]

Thank you for your thoughts. Glad you stopped by!

[Einstein Noodle]

eeeeyow! damned if you do and damned if you don't ... helpless against the invasion .. it is complete .. a siren a banshee a hydra she must have been ;)
i like the angle of the tangle in this but can we not ruin Autumn's secret places??! ;)
E.

[Tai Ryens]

Aha, thank you! Let's try not to!