Fitch

Just another silly poem with some dark humor :)

Deep in the forest, in a high Oak tree, lived Fitch the owl.
Fitch had a twitch, Fitch liked to howl.
For kicks and giggles, he would pop out his eyes
And throw them down at the critters for an evil surprise.
He would cackle and hoot, and roll with delight
As the rabbits and squirrels fled the scene in a fright.
One night he heard a rustling sound below,
And he wondered at whom his eyes he would throw.
The movement became louder, with no one in sight.
Fitch readied himself and pranced with delight.
When the small animal stepped into the clearing,
Fitch automatically sent his eyes veering.
Bulls-eye! To the animal his eyes did stick.
But shortly after, he felt a sharp prick.
The pain became searing and caused much distress.
And soon after he became aware of the bloody mess.
Fitch had picked the wrong prey this time.
For now his eyes were pierced by a white porcupine.
The blood from his eyes stained the porcupine's mitts,
Causing her to grow angry and tear his eyes to bits.
Fitch was left alone to cry from his empty sockets,
while the porcupine was gone like a red pointy rocket.
To poor Fitch's twitchy defeat and demise,
he now had no ammo; he now had no eyes.

Author's Note

I previously wrote about Pegs the albino porcupine about a year ago, and my boyfriend recently requested I write another silly poem because he loves my dark humor. So nothing serious, but here you go, have a laugh. ;)

Reviews

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

I actually thought pegs wasnt that great was a little to weird for my liking.
Although i obviously loved this write seeing as it won second place in my contest.
It was still kind of weird but the story line was great, the rhyming was better which kept me reading as well.
It was a very creative write not many people would think to write of something like this, i like that its different.
I loved the ending great poem was more then worthy of an award congrats :)

[Alana McGuire]

Thank you. :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

your most welcome :)

[lfrii76]

Awesome as always. Able to comprehend the humor in this opus.

[Alana McGuire]

Thank you! :)

[eatmills]

And the moral of the story... becareful where you cast your eyes. lol Great limerick.

[Alana McGuire]

Hahah thank you!!

[C. Monique Langston]

Lol It flowed nice and it was humorous. You should write a children's book if you haven't already.

[Alana McGuire]

Thank you! I've actually been considering it for a few years now. :)

[C. Monique Langston]

Go for it! I'd read it!

[Alana McGuire]

Aww, thanks!(:

[Richard Layne]

Oh man--this is like one of Grimm's tales ha ha.
thanks for the silly :) we need it sometimes!

[Alana McGuire]

xD Thank you! I'm glad I could help with your need of silly.

[Angi]

Ha! I love, love this, Alana! Poor fitch. The last line was perfect. Nicely done! Angi~

[Alana McGuire]

Hahah thank you so much! :)

[Angi]

You are very welcome.

[Angi]

Congratulations, Alana! I am so happy I could place, 'Fitch' in my Peculiar poetry challenge! Love this!

[Alana McGuire]

Thank you so much! :)