Time Travel

Words trying to describe a feeling connected to a memory

The air held me sweet
As I allowed myself a
Reverie
A Crisp morning wanes
And i soak in the
Silence
So vivid the memory
That I let envelope
Me
That I lose sense of time
And let go of the present
Tense
A time traveller's travesty
Sent back in my
Mind
Clutching at something
Long past and
Dissolved
These outstretched fingers
Grasping at
Nothing
Let me know how I feel
Is a grown Childs
Lament

Reviews

[Cody Jeremy Thompson]

Pretty nice piece of work probably gonna check out some more of your poems because of this nice first impression.

[LapseOfMind]

Awesome! Glad to hear that!

[richieb]

Beautiful words of longing. Good memories are to be treasured, wrapped in velvet and put in a safe place so they can be savored like a long cool drink on a sultry summer night. Thank you. Richie B.

[LapseOfMind]

Thank you very much, i appreciate it

[TheMalady]

He is drawn into the memories of his past. It seems he is yearning for something, perhaps someone that he wanted to change his past, though it's too late. It cannot be undone anymore.

Deja vu and nostalgia - they are powerful and fleeting abstract words and sensation. When I read this, it feels as though my mind is drifting into the stream of time. Thanks for sharing this! :) Awesome piece! :)

[LapseOfMind]

I am really happy that you enjoyed it! Thank you for taking the time to read and review it, I greatly appreciate it

[TheMalady]

You're very welcome! :)

[Cyndy Robinson]

Beautiful Poem, I am drawn to the lines "A crisp morning wanes and i soak in the Silence, so vivid the memory that I let envelope me"

[LapseOfMind]

Thank you very much, I'm glad that you enjoyed it!

[Celie Rose]

I like this poem very much. Well expressed.I get a sense that time travel would be exhilarating. Job well done!

[LapseOfMind]

Thank you, in this poem the time travel was some memories I allowed myself to dwell upon. In a sense, we all time travel, as we remember our past and think to the future

[Suzy Hazelwood]

Oooh, what a gorgeous poem!! Some poetry I come across just draws me want to read them over and over - this has that effect for me. And we all have these moments, strange and sometimes heart wrenching memories, but essential for our sanity that we don't bury them and lose where have been, and who we have become because of them. Excellent writing!!!♥

[LapseOfMind]

Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it. It was an awesome feeling to write about, considering, I wrote this in the moment

[Fran Marie]

Going back in time to those distant but vivid memories,
a serene sense of freedom flows in this poem..lovely

[LapseOfMind]

Thank you, I had been trying to figure out for two days how to describe that feeling

[Dak]

"that i lose sense of time and let go of the present tense" i think that's really all that needs to be done sometimes. great poem

-Dak

[LapseOfMind]

Thank you very much and yes, sometimes just letting go is all that's needed

[Coyote Poetry]

I liked the poem a lot.
"Clutching at something
Long past and
Dissolved "
I believe most of us do this. Seek things lost and can't be found. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[LapseOfMind]

I'm glad you enjoyed it, thank you. Yeah I think we're all searching for something that just can't be found

[Coyote Poetry]

I did and you are welcome.