Hymns of Sadness

Hymns of Sadness

A Poem by Flowers of Eternity
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It's sad to know I'm done.

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Nobody noticed my anger
Nobody noticed I'm shattered
Nobody noticed my strength
They always focus on my weakness
Nobody noticed I'm empty
Nobody noticed my plea
Nobody noticed I'm at it's end
Just another day of playing pretend
Nobody noticed I'm hollow
Nobody noticed my sorrows
Nobody noticed my pain
All they noticed are the mistakes that I have made

© 2018 Flowers of Eternity



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Flowers of Eternity
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You remind us of our own childhood challenges before we understoodt that maturation is a painful process. We find out later in life that having empathy eases our own burdens. You cover the discomfort pretty well here. The imagery is clear and crisp, and the piece ends strong. You might fix the idiom in Line 7 "... at wit's end." Keep up the good work.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Flowers of Eternity

1 Month Ago

Thank you so much for the review and the correction you made! Truly appreciated it! Thank you!



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You remind us of our own childhood challenges before we understoodt that maturation is a painful process. We find out later in life that having empathy eases our own burdens. You cover the discomfort pretty well here. The imagery is clear and crisp, and the piece ends strong. You might fix the idiom in Line 7 "... at wit's end." Keep up the good work.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Flowers of Eternity

1 Month Ago

Thank you so much for the review and the correction you made! Truly appreciated it! Thank you!
love the repetitveness of this too

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Flowers of Eternity

5 Months Ago

Thank you so much for reading it!!!
This would make a great song, voice and guitar. Just sayin. :):). It has a strong Lady Gaga feel to it, raw, edgy and powerful, like the outrage of a fighter getting up off the mat to fight some more.

V

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Flowers of Eternity

5 Months Ago

Thank you for the suggestion!
And thank you so much for reading it!!
It feels like you voice my feelings. Your poems speak directly to me and I love to read something that expresses my feelings in exact way and you did just that.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Flowers of Eternity

5 Months Ago

Thank you so much for your words!
That really means a lot to me!
Najam Us Saher

5 Months Ago

It was my pleasure reading your work.
Nobody also needs to know all these things as long as you have the knowledge of what makes you. True, shoulders droop and sighs heighten at the gravity of things when life throws you a curveball. But I am confident that time heals, and you will bounce back higher than before.

Your poem is stark- but written well. Hard hitting, and effective.

Take care.

Best,
M.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Flowers of Eternity

5 Months Ago

Thank you so much for your words!
That really means a lot to me!!
Thanks
It is really sad if we think that our negative side is noticed and picked apart while our good points are never brought to the surface. That is demoralising, and I felt that in your lines.

Chris

Posted 5 Months Ago


Flowers of Eternity

5 Months Ago

Thank you so much for reading it!
I tend not to go for a simple poem with a repetitive structure. So the message has to be strong & it must be enhanced by this repetition, or I'm going to be lukewarm about a poem. That's why I have to say, the details of what you've chosen to say here make all the difference . . . this is a very strong message, so relatable, so well expressed. Sometimes it seems like people just want to fix me & so I retreat. Even tho your poem is simple in structure, the message is deep & honest (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 5 Months Ago


Flowers of Eternity

5 Months Ago

Thank you so much for your kind words!
Truly appreciated it!
A honest ride in the words. Maybe, we show people real face and share real thoughts rarely. We shared little. I liked the tone of the words and the flow of thoughts leading to honest ending. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 5 Months Ago


Flowers of Eternity

5 Months Ago

Thank you so much for reviewing it!!!
That means a lot to me!
Coyote Poetry

5 Months Ago

Was my pleasure and you are welcome.
that`s the way it works nobody really notices

Posted 5 Months Ago


Flowers of Eternity

5 Months Ago

Yeah, which is sad.
Thank so much for reading it!
 wordman

5 Months Ago

you`re welcome
Well said... this says it all to me. Loud and clear. It's so true. People notice more about your downfalls and weaknesses than your good points.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Flowers of Eternity

5 Months Ago

Yeah, that is what i am struggling right now
Dawn

5 Months Ago

We habe to learn to not dwell on negativity and lack of self confidance when low and depressed withi.. read more
Flowers of Eternity

5 Months Ago

Thank you so much for your words Dawn!
Thanks for the advice as well!
It lighten up my.. read more

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