This Old House

This Old House

A Poem by Bright Ocean Star

This Old House….

 

Like the darkened, spotted petals

Of a rose, lying on the soil

Beneath the tree

These four walls and a porch

Sits crumbling

Long past its glory

Faded, mold-studded

Spots mar the

Silky tissues

Once bloomed

With dynamic

Drama and light

Now lay wasted

Boarded for the rats

Ivy climbs the walls

The roof has caved

The memories

Last forever

Written

In the ghostly air

Upon this place

Ancestral drama

Played out on this

Stage. Relations

Long past raced among

These hills and

Called this house

Home.

Never to be lived

In again.

It sits upon this hill

Alone.

 

 

Bright Ocean Star; October 7, 2015


© 2015 Bright Ocean Star



Author's Note

Bright Ocean Star
I was inspired by an old memory of visiting my great grandparent's old house in upper New York State more than a decade ago. A sad old shack, a shell of it's former self. Amazing it was still standing...

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like the house on haunted hill....but i can feel it in this poem....a house that longs to be lived in again, that wants attention...and the hills are the house's only companions...but the house wants that activity..it is lonely...

love the perspective..

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bright Ocean Star

2 Years Ago

Thank you, Jacob.
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There is nothing more sad and lonely, yet more inviting and intriguing, than an old abandoned house. -- Note, I would probably substitute "Are" for Sits in the Sit crumbling line, but that's just me.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bright Ocean Star

1 Year Ago

Yeay! You've been to visit two of my little poems! I've missed this place, and all of you. Thank you.. read more
Lyn Anderson

1 Year Ago

I missed you too. I have been busy since my return.
Bright Ocean Star

1 Year Ago

I noticed! I should be getting my laptop back from the repair shop soon, so hopefully, I'll be able .. read more
Those memories bring the past alive when we appreciate them and the imagery they evoke. You have shared a good one in a marvelous write...:)..........

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bright Ocean Star

1 Year Ago

Thank you for your kind words, Samis. I appreciate you dropping by. :)
Sami Khalil

1 Year Ago

You are welcome. ...:).......
Wow ! reminds me of an old abandoned house i once wanted. I live in upstate NY. hmm what are the odds???
What town?
Ps. I love your rendition of "old house" :-)

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Cryingkate

1 Year Ago

Amazing ! i agree,
Don't wait up for a reply tonight. I'm going to bed soon, However I rarely.. read more
Cryingkate

1 Year Ago

We even share family photos. Absolutely amazing.
Bright Ocean Star

1 Year Ago

What?! Kate, show me!
I like how you compare the escalation of a house's life to the decomposition of a rose.
I like the hundreds of years of history considered also.
Well played, very dark and lovely.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bright Ocean Star

1 Year Ago

Thank you, Bluefire. I'm sorry it has taken me so long to respond to your review. I thought I left.. read more
Bluefire

2 Months Ago

You're welcome
I enjoyed the description in the poetry. Made the old house look sad and alone. You create lonely place and forgotten memories. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 2 Years Ago


Bright Ocean Star

2 Years Ago

Thank you for dropping in to read and review it. I appreciate your opinion. It is nice to see you .. read more
Coyote Poetry

2 Years Ago

I will return and you are welcome.
like the house on haunted hill....but i can feel it in this poem....a house that longs to be lived in again, that wants attention...and the hills are the house's only companions...but the house wants that activity..it is lonely...

love the perspective..

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bright Ocean Star

2 Years Ago

Thank you, Jacob.
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Thank you for the poem, I read it a few times and got into the mood of what you were giving us.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bright Ocean Star

2 Years Ago

Thank you for dropping in Joe.

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