Cherry trees and Chickadees

Cherry trees and Chickadees

A Poem by Pretty_as_a_Poet
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One day I was siting under the cherry blossoms in my yard....

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Sweetly sweeping through the grove,

A gentle breeze, stirs up the air,

Slightly swaying, swaying, swaying,

Awakening the cherry blossoms fair,

The Laughing wind, in its caress

Wakes the chickadee from its rest

And so he sings his velvet song

Perched upon his tranquil nest,

Pretty petals of pink silk,

Dance amongst the summer’s breath

Faintly murmurs fluttering free,

Wakening the blue from winter’s death,

The world spins steadily around again

 Once again the clock strikes five

Just one moment under the cherry trees,

No better time to be alive,


© 2013 Pretty_as_a_Poet



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I thoroughly enjoyed this! Really peaceful, really magical. It had good flair! Great imagery, killer ending! And splendid musicality....except, if you don't mind my saying, in 3 places: Line 4 (dispense with "awakening", for it only adds unnecessary syllables to an otherwise great line, whose "cherry blossoms" could be "swaying, swaying, swaying", which I believe was your intention, but the "awakening" is unnecessary here); "Wakening the blue from winter's death" has the same musicality issues, but in this case I wouldn't know how to suggest fixing it; and finally take the "Just" out of the second last line, and the musicality would better carry over. Other than that, this is fantastic! Well done!

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I thoroughly enjoyed this! Really peaceful, really magical. It had good flair! Great imagery, killer ending! And splendid musicality....except, if you don't mind my saying, in 3 places: Line 4 (dispense with "awakening", for it only adds unnecessary syllables to an otherwise great line, whose "cherry blossoms" could be "swaying, swaying, swaying", which I believe was your intention, but the "awakening" is unnecessary here); "Wakening the blue from winter's death" has the same musicality issues, but in this case I wouldn't know how to suggest fixing it; and finally take the "Just" out of the second last line, and the musicality would better carry over. Other than that, this is fantastic! Well done!

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love this!!! It just...feels good!!! Great job.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This brought a smile ...and a memory.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Cherry trees are my favorite tree, and chickadees are my favorite bird. this is so tranquil and serene; a beautiful image. wonderful job :)

Posted 4 Years Ago



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