The Dragon

The Dragon

A Poem by Leran Vakem

Darkness is one with my Soul
as the blood keeps
dripping from wrist cut for you
Keep drinking, you may have
all I have to offer
Never spoken a word of complaint
freely given to you
with a smile in my eyes
The more you drink
the more we become one
So keep drink, as much as you want
my blood from my wrists
which has been cut for you.
The dragon will obey your wish
my fire yours to command
your enemies mine to destroy
So just give me the word

© 2008 Leran Vakem


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The dragon will obey you wish --- I think you mean "your"
my fire yours to command
your enemies my to destroy -------- and I think it should me mine,
So just give me the word.

Heh, I may be way off on the corrections, but I love the obedience, the loyalty in this piece, and the sacrifice. A definite favorite. Nicely done! :)

*Sparks

Posted 15 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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Wow. This one is so strong, yet a little bittersweet, because you have to hurt yourself to feed their love for you...wonderful piece of writing.

Posted 15 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

POWERFULLY Done! Great reciprocal nature of giving all! Surrender to the emotion and protection found in it~!

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is very interesting...I love the lines"

The more you drink
the more we become one

Are you the dragon? The first line "Darkness is one with my soul" makes me think that the dragon is a part of you. The imagery of someone cutting their wrists and letting someone drink from them is reminiscent of the sacrament...drinking wine as if it were Jesus' blood. I think you have some great, very subtle levels to this poem. It can be read many ways.

I think that the last line weakens the poem. It seems out of sync with the rest of the poem, but that's just my opinion. Either way it's a great poem!

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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The dragon will obey you wish --- I think you mean "your"
my fire yours to command
your enemies my to destroy -------- and I think it should me mine,
So just give me the word.

Heh, I may be way off on the corrections, but I love the obedience, the loyalty in this piece, and the sacrifice. A definite favorite. Nicely done! :)

*Sparks

Posted 15 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.


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Leran Vakem
Leran Vakem

Where the Light runs from the Dark, South Africa



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What you see is what you get with me, I've been writing poetry since I was like 17 years old. Been writing on and off for 11 years now. I'm working on my first book at the moment, hope to finish befor.. more..

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