A Star

Too many people pretend.

I'm losing ideas

Thoughts

I've written so much

And for so long

That I've forgotten what it's like

To care about my handwriting

I'm only still writing

To push myself for when I put the pen down

So when I close my notebook

No more thoughts will cross my mind

Instead sleep will take me

It'll give me peace

Even if it's only for a few hours

It is the one thing 

That keeps my sanity where it belongs

I doubt I have much sanity left

But at least I can pretend

And smile

And joke

Like my brother didn't just try to kill himself 

Reviews

[Serene Star]

Writing is meditative
It helps the soul
I wish well onto your brother
Everything will be alright

[Carolynn]

Wow you ended with such a totally unexpected line. I don't know what to say except I hope someone can pull him out of the depression he must obviously be struggling with (unless it was another cause...regardless I do so hope that he finds help) and that you find rest. Stay strong for him and keep writing - it can be very healing!

[Eve]

Thank you so much for the positive and kind words.

[Chris Shaw]

Powerful and the punch line wasn't what I expected at all. I can't imagine how devastating it must feel to have a sibling attempting suicide. Well related.

Chris

[Eve]

It's a difficult time for everyone, thank you for the review.

[Chris Shaw]

Of course. I hope your brother receives the help he needs to deal with his problems, and I hope that peace will be restored for all of you before long.

[LKBillips]

Whoa. I did not see that coming at all. Very powerful piece. Nicely structured as well.

[Arpita Mondal]

I cannot tell you how much emotional I got after reading this poem. This poem is my whole life explained. It felt like someone wrote down my thoughts in verses. I lost my brother very young and have been writing since. I can't stop writing. It feels like if I don't get the words out, they'll choke me from inside or I'll lose my mind. Thank you so much for writing this poem.

[Eve]

I'm so sorry to hear that, but on the other hand I'm glad to relate to you so well. That is exactly why I write, because I fear if I don't I won't make it to the end game. Thank you for the review, and I apologize for responding so late.

[Arpita Mondal]

There's nothing to apologise for dear. :)