two

two

A Poem by lily
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my crazed, teenage mind is exploding

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I try to clear my mind of you

because I know you have moved on
and I should as well

because you are so confusing

the thought of you makes my heart sink 
but also float above the clouds

the thought of you masks my common sense
but also makes everything as clear as day

I don't understand you
but maybe that's what makes you so enticing 

you come into my mind so often

but I know I never even cross your thoughts



lily

© 2015 lily


Author's Note

lily
it is always so difficult for me to put my thoughts into words, but for some reason, with this "journal entry" type of poem, it just flowed out of me. even if it doesn't make complete sense, I'm glad I am finally getting back into the groove of writing.

all criticism is greatly appreciated

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I love the way you portray being torn between loving another and forgetting that person as they've forgotten you. Beautiful piece with an intriguing writing technique

Posted 8 Years Ago


lily

8 Years Ago

Wow, I really appreciate your comments. I was trying to convey something like that, and I am glad I .. read more
This is really good. I have felt like this one too many times. It sucks :( I think you did a great job putting it into words. Bravo :D

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

lily

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much! I really appreciate this. :)

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Added on November 7, 2015
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Tags: life, teen, love

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