Driftwood

Driftwood

A Poem by Linda Marie Van Tassell
"

I am cleaved by the joy and pain.

"



The wind whispers, and the words are rain.

The moon is brushing her silver hair;

and I am cleaved by the joy and pain


that shape my world, my spirit, my air.

I am a gypsy, a mystery,

the moon is brushing her silver hair;


and all the things that are meant to be

will ever be as they will or do.

I am a gypsy, a mystery,


a breath that dissolves into the blue;

and dreams will drift and be on their way,

will ever be as they will or do


until shadows stain and sorrows sway

until sweet promises fade for good,

and dreams will drift and be on their way


forever floating like drift to wood.

The wind whispers, and the words are rain

until sweet promises fade for good

and I am cleaved by the joy and pain.



© 2017 Linda Marie Van Tassell



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Hints of Tennyson. Lovely imagery and rhythm. Poignant truths in the last stanza. Excellent poem. 100/100

Posted 2 Months Ago


This is my favorite kind of poetry. The kind that just draws you in and carries you along like the wind. I absolutely love this.

~Luna

Posted 3 Months Ago


I feel this is a poem recited in a silent moment of self thought. It is a magically powerful poem.

Posted 3 Months Ago


The whole tone of this is magical. I feel an indian/spanish feel from this partly because of the music. The words are beautifully metaphorical.

Great writing. :)

Posted 3 Months Ago


This image speaks with a whisper. Your words are soft and do well to breath life into the image without having to shout. It's a fresh and soft piece that I very much enjoyed.

Posted 3 Months Ago


Linda Marie Van Tassell

3 Months Ago

Thank you. I was not happy with this when finished and ended up writing Driftwood II. I would appr.. read more
Celticmoon

3 Months Ago

It would be my pleasure to have a read of the revision and share my thoughts.
I seen the photo and thought how hollow,empty,yet though lifeless it still had a story to tell, nice work

W.R. Stowe

Posted 3 Months Ago


Hello, Linda! :)
This is beautiful. I realize I'm screwing things up here, but for me it reads better like this:

"The wind whispers, and the words are rain.
The moon is brushing her silver hair;
and I am cleaved by the joy and pain
that shape my world, my spirit, my air.

I am a gypsy, a mystery,
the moon is brushing her silver hair;
and all the things that are meant to be
will ever be as they will or do.

I am a gypsy, a mystery,
a breath that dissolves into the blue;
and dreams will drift and be on their way,
will ever be as they will or do

until shadows stain and sorrows sway
until sweet promises fade for good,
and dreams will drift and be on their way
forever floating like drift to wood.

The wind whispers, and the words are rain
until sweet promises fade for good
and I am cleaved by the joy and pain."


Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Linda Marie Van Tassell

3 Months Ago

Thank you.

The Terzanelle is a combination of the Villanelle and Terza Rima. It cons.. read more
mattavelli

3 Months Ago

That looks like a fun write. The Terza Rima is new to me as well. Thanks for the introduction! :)
Perfect marriage of art, words, and music. Love the eloquence, musicality, repetition and ethereal imagery-"The moon is brushing her silver hair."-memorable line. " I am cleaved by the joy and pain."-yes! Love hurts. Great.

Posted 3 Months Ago


the pic caught my eye instantly and then the music started ... so i listened ... not to be distracted when reading ... but then the music kind of blended into the background and i read your poem ..wonderful first verse .. very dramatic, romantic personifications and so fit the pic ...i enjoy the mysteries you wrap around and into your poem through "gypsies' ... the music also weaving a spell ... such a complete package .. and the wisdom of our life in pain and sorrow ..bitter sweet as we learn so much from it ..gaining empathy and depth of character .. so glad i stopped to read this poem ..just beautiful says i!
E.

Posted 3 Months Ago


This is an amazing terzanelle, Linda.
The rhymes flow with ease and the descriptions are vivid and evocative. I love the repeated lines (characteristic of the form) and how they complement the poem's haunting atmosphere. I also like how you used enjambment between lines and stanzas to add your special touch of uniqueness ... it made the words read less predictably, almost like free verse.
I enjoyed every stanza, but the profound simplicity of "and all the things that are meant to be / will ever be as they will or do" stood out as my favorite lines.
Brilliant poem.

- William Liston

Posted 3 Months Ago



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