Remix: With Great Respect.

Don't even talk

Who we are lies

In what we know

Come ideas divine

In criminaly articulate

Minds that define crimes

andEveryone knows more than they can say

Everyonestill has reasons

Why they stay

In

What they want

Lies somewhere

In between

What we know

To be divine

That thing that just on occasion

        occasionally

Is someone else's crime

And we will die for that

Like it never happened

Sticks and ashes

Cold fleshy soil

On top is a gravestone

Don't lie on my gravestone

Like we always do.

　

Reviews

[Barbara Walker]

"Everyone knows more than they can say", I sometimes wonder if its can or want to. And if its want to why r they being miserly with their words, therefore, their thoughts?
My tablet blew up yesterday and I am using my phone which is difficult. When I have my laptop in a few days I look forward to reading more of your work.

[Davidgeo]

I made it far better.

With words and stuff.

[argentis]

With great respect, I wasn't too keen on the first version, this unfortunately is no better.

[Davidgeo]

Everyday? You're going to do this every day?

You even took 2 minutes to write and 'about me' and post one thing before making your way over this time.... you're really stepping your game up guys. Though I hope you have better insults today.. yesterday was kind of a disappointment.

[SheepishScoop]

This is a tasty little bite to chew on! I love it.
The ending gives a nice little slap that has a lasting sting, in a good way, of course.
"To be divine
Is someone's crime"
Something to mull over and reflect on. I may be wrong, but is this to mean: to claim to know all is a crime? The limits of our knowledge define us, and to pretend to know beyond is a false claim, on its own and as a defining point to our character? I may have missed the ball here, but it brought me to ponder knowledge as defining a person and questioning my own views on knowledge as defining (Or in my case the view of our lack of knowledge being a major definition of characters and ownership of simply being human).

Tangent done: I miss the poop jokes and obscenities... but, still an incredible and lovely piece. Thank you :)

[ThePaperPrincess]

Another one of your poems I actually like, you know cause it's not terrible. Haha. For real though I do like this, well done my friend.

[Davidgeo]

thanks doll.