Communication as it is Limited by Perception

in a linear sense i am quite lost
i think we are all indeed lost
   in a very single file line
*see time and instinct
then go to war with impulse and control
how hard can one fight
do you think?
from an extremely polite living
vigorously enduring varying signs of consciousness
  (hide the f*****g taboo)
learn to make pleasure
generically
(secretly)
find out how to enjoy pain
as my traits are my living
(i am living)
among the living predictable
i hide inside danger
as my home sits between
the living predictable
and the dead indestructible
ugh...
(communication is perception)
the dead become music
the living, oh the living
limited by understanding
i have no idea how to live
my music sounds like a dinosaur giving birth

Reviews

[R J Askew]

Love those last two lines esp. They make me grimace wryly.

[Davidgeo]

thanks mr askew

[Ana B.]

the last line is funny haha.

Seems like the only thing stopping one to find the truth is its brain. But, life, cruel as it is, never lacked in humor. Loved the petals of this one.

[Davidgeo]

There is something wrong with this poem. It's not very good but I think it should be and I don't know why or how to make it so.

If this poem was a fully retarded pregnancy I'd abort it with prejudice.

[Davidgeo]

(that last line probably came off wrong)

[Ana B.]

hahaha, s**t, that is funny,no need for abortion, though. I'd say its a good one, though the title induces a confusing intention . Perhaps if it where just a one word title, it would give a completely different tone. My first though after reading was - This should be named ''Vacuum'' . The space devoid of matter should be incredibly silent. So silent that one needs to cover his ears.

[Davidgeo]

Yeah, the deafening silence.

This poem will be aborted

[Davidgeo]

I can't write for s**t this week... it's all been abortions.

[Ana B.]

It came, it existed, then to the void it goes. like all that it is.

[Davidgeo]

You just made me think of 'the lord of the rings', the first one... "i see you... you cannot hide, in the void"

[Ana B.]

damn, i should watch that again sometime. Love movies that can be interpreted in so many ways. the lord of the rings always associates with the establishment of the totalitarian regime.

[Davidgeo]

Whenever I mention Lord of the Rings anywhere I get messages and comments insinuating that I'm gayer than AIDS. I've already got my first customer believe it or not (bevpowers you're a d********g... (I kinda wish I was gay sometimes just to be more annoying to them) We woulda made a great team if we were both gay writers.

[Ana B.]

haha, seems like every discussion turns to the gay direction. I wonder why. though i'm not going there, gay people will sue me if they hear my opinion.

[Davidgeo]

It's because you're probably gayer than aids.

[Ana B.]

lol, probably though that's an alarming thought :D

[Davidgeo]

don't fret, you're still adorable i'm sure