Evidence of Absence

Evidence of Absence

A Poem by JohnsDavidburg
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Suicide as an obvious option
Proves life unequivocally
Probably
Though I've never tried it
I believe the evidence
In this moment
Is quite convincing
That living is the better option
Probably
As it's all I've known
I could certainly be wrong

© 2017 JohnsDavidburg



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So..
We've got a sensitive topic here: suicide.
When we're talking about a thing that can cause death, we need to be careful to don't inspire the wrong message.
I think you did a good job because none of your words gave the reader a suicidal feeling. The poem inspires a melancholic, sad feeling. Also, it makes the reader ask himself/herself questions.

For short, you've done a good job! :)

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

JohnsDavidburg

4 Months Ago

Thanks. I'm glad it appealed to you.



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Loved the title dear author. Life is a strange thing, we can't prove that we exist.Are we real even? I wish cats were purple...

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ana B.

2 Months Ago

I will remember that.
JohnsDavidburg

2 Months Ago

Which one?
Ana B.

2 Months Ago

The one regarding the old requests.Although in that aspect, we're quite opposites, i rarely ever edi.. read more
Of course, there is no certainity of what is on the other side, so I'll stick to my known devils. I like the appreciation of life in this poem.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

JohnsDavidburg

3 Months Ago

I'm with you on that topic.
really good, tight write.

sometimes we get into that rut...each day we look for a reason not to do it...

j.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

JohnsDavidburg

3 Months Ago

I'm glad you liked it.
So..
We've got a sensitive topic here: suicide.
When we're talking about a thing that can cause death, we need to be careful to don't inspire the wrong message.
I think you did a good job because none of your words gave the reader a suicidal feeling. The poem inspires a melancholic, sad feeling. Also, it makes the reader ask himself/herself questions.

For short, you've done a good job! :)

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

JohnsDavidburg

4 Months Ago

Thanks. I'm glad it appealed to you.
Silente.... stop leaving comments and then immediately blocking me so I cannot directly respond. It's pure cowardice to do s**t like that. As you can see I don't block you even though you clearly have some serious problems culminating in a very distorted "knight in shining armor" dumb a*s complex. I welcome a dialogue between us but you, just go for the bully with no brains hit and run tactic. And by the way, kid, I 'm not the one hiding... that's you "mr leave a comment and then block any direct response" d********g. Seriously kid... it's really weird and a little pathetic that you keep coming back to read and interact with someone you clearly hate. And what's with down thumbing everyone who comments on my work? They have nothing to do with whatever you think is going on. Are you seriously this childish? Ugh... stop embarrassing yourself, it's getting really pathetic and sad to witness.

Posted 4 Months Ago


Perhaps if you did not troll people for a living... You would not face such a conflict of spirit... I am returning to give you that dose of attention you so crave... Maybe this time it will spark another beautiful essay on your hatred for me... Maybe you will continue to hide behind asinine and convoluted logic in order to convince yourself it is "okay" to attack others... Whatever the conclusion, we both know I bother you more than you bother me... That, my dear friend, the entirety of deep satisfaction... That allows me to ALWAYS win. Both in spirit and mind, enjoy your day...! (Hint, you are wrong)

Posted 4 Months Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The art of living and suicide are fodder for most writers and poets at sometime or other, and sad to say many of my friends have chosen the latter.I enjoyed the read.
John

Posted 4 Months Ago


2 of 3 people found this review constructive.

JohnsDavidburg

2 Months Ago

I'm going to kill myself when the time comes. Not in an idiot emo or nihilistic way... but if I ha.. read more
Working in the field I work in, from personal experiences with family members, I truly believe and know living is the better option. The everlasting affects on the people left behind is immeasurable.

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

JohnsDavidburg

4 Months Ago

True belief and knowing don't use the same standards of definition. I truly believe that no one ali.. read more
Birdwild

4 Months Ago

Your poem, your thoughts.
A statement of fact in a poetic form indeed.

After all, "Probably" makes the real sense of the fact in the poem to stand corrected.

"I believe the evidence
In this moment
To be quite convincing
That living is the better option"

I think it would have been;

"I believe the evidence
In this moment
Is quite convincing
That living is the better option"

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

JohnsDavidburg

4 Months Ago

Yeah, I think I like your suggestion. "Is quite convincing" is better. Thanks for that.

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Nassau, New Providence, Bahamas



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