"Born in Sin? Come On In" - Andre Linoge

. linoge is an anagram of legion .

A morality of the very strictest variety,

From birth, it sets you free.

To live predictably, to fit in formulaically;

To become always eventually, guilty, of its militant accountability.

That is to be, what sets you free.

(punishment, shame, guilt, and remorse... b***h repent!)

And remain trapped in judgment,

Hung like an ornament on the family tree.

                   Become the example! (kirk cameron style)

Decorating in geographically determined hypocrisy,

For a living. . . this makes you free.

In the vain of a polluted evolution,

Needlessly compelled to be the same things, perpetually;

That sounds like hell. . . (to me)

So maybe,

Amorality of the strictest variety, applied intelligently,

Is the only thing to save us. . . to confront the repetition,

We must become controlled insanity.

"Hell is repetition"

A. Linoge

"born in sin? come on in!"

A. Linoge

(legion)

'Storm of the Century' (s king)

Author's Note

Reviews

[Kathrine Rethorn]

I like the idea of this poem. Definitely havent read anything like it.

I think a few lines have to many syllables and makes it a mouth full.

however if that what you were going for then keep it! It all depends on how you wanted it to sound. It does make the reader stop and slow down, sow i wouldn't say its a bad effect either way.

[Davidgeo]

I'm glad I wasn't the only one. You're so right about "mouthful" and too "many syllables" thing. Word economy is normally very dear to me; this poem is kinda s****y in that regard.

I hope you continue to never hesitate to point out flaws. This site has a problem with that whole "thin skinned" predisposition thing.

[Davidgeo]

Also, I'd bet you read something like this before. Even s****y writing like this is always contrived.

[Nipplegrinder]

Started strong, got wordy, finished strong. Well intentioned piece, mang.

[Davidgeo]

Thanks for pointing out the wordy thing. Word economy used to be strength of mine, I need to get back to that. I'm way to lazy to fix this thing, but your comment will help remind me in the future.