Occupation

Occupation

A Poem by Dead Alive Dave
"

. bipolar monkey

"
i am not an idea
  however wrong today
i will exist here tomorrow
  evolving quite constantly
i am not an occupation
  i am this bipolar monkey
in the business of being me
  perpetually incomplete
unfinished almost perfectly
  until the day that i die
on the day i retire
  and become an idea


© 2018 Dead Alive Dave



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I like how it goes back to the first line about being "an idea" in the end. There's a name for doing that, but I can't remember what it's called.

I derived a meaning of growing continuously in this life, and never reaching perfection, but being perfectly yourself in imperfection. I'm intrigued by the "bipolar monkey" phrase.

I enjoyed reading it!

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dead Alive Dave

9 Months Ago

There is indeed a specific term. It's not as fun if I don't let you figure that out eventually.
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H L Rose

9 Months Ago

A dunadh!!
Dead Alive Dave

9 Months Ago

Ha... if you were slightly older I would try and sex with you.



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We are not ideas-brilliant-we are humans, and we are present and we are living, and unlike an idea we can't be controlled or moved on from, we will keep on being until the day when we can no longer. A perfect example of untamable imperfection.
Not quite sure what you meant by when we retire we do become an idea though, is it that we are no longer as capable as when were younger and more able to fulfil our aspirations and take them further than an idea-if so that is very sad-or were you just referring to death again??
Lovely, slightly strange read, well done

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dead Alive Dave

9 Months Ago

When we 'retire' (die) what is left, hopefully, are memories your loved ones have of you... i.e. an .. read more
Emma

9 Months Ago

No I love the strangeness and I'm glad that the ending thought was a happy one rather than my rather.. read more
Dead Alive Dave

9 Months Ago

Your interpretation was not wrong, it just wasn't specifically what I had in mind. It does fit none.. read more
You've become your own idea, thought provoking, I'm a pessimist when referring to myself, or my life, this is to me anyway, one's self looking at what they would like to be, but only achieving it when they've gone, as in an Artist, works only popular after they pass. I liked it, you can tell, i wrote to much.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dead Alive Dave

9 Months Ago

Statements like that lead me to believe you understood not a single word of the aforementioned poem... read more
A.J.Thompson

9 Months Ago

not that sort of person, i'll leave the banter to you, enjoy your day
Dead Alive Dave

9 Months Ago

To be brutally honest, I think you're fake and just pandering for the sake of interaction. You're n.. read more
I liked it!
“Perpetually incomplete “
Very 👍

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dead Alive Dave

9 Months Ago

Sweet.... I'm glad you liked it, it's one of my better ones.
Loved it ! after all we are all monkeys with cloths on!

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dead Alive Dave

9 Months Ago

Thanks! I prefer clothes to hair myself. Technically I should of used the term "ape" as "monkeys" .. read more
Hebe

9 Months Ago

True.....lol!
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Amy
I like it! The poem is very deep towards the end.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dead Alive Dave

9 Months Ago

Thanks Amy. I'm glad you liked it.
I think bi-polar people are very complete. More complete that those who define themselves as normal. After all, they have the best of both worlds. Don't they? (Forgive me if I sound insensitive. I am bi-polar) As regards monkeys being bi-polar, that's interesting. And novel.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dead Alive Dave

9 Months Ago

Bi polar people are very complete, we experience almost the entire spectrum of human emotion... but .. read more
DIVYA

9 Months Ago

It's worth it.
I like how it goes back to the first line about being "an idea" in the end. There's a name for doing that, but I can't remember what it's called.

I derived a meaning of growing continuously in this life, and never reaching perfection, but being perfectly yourself in imperfection. I'm intrigued by the "bipolar monkey" phrase.

I enjoyed reading it!

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dead Alive Dave

9 Months Ago

There is indeed a specific term. It's not as fun if I don't let you figure that out eventually.
read more
H L Rose

9 Months Ago

A dunadh!!
Dead Alive Dave

9 Months Ago

Ha... if you were slightly older I would try and sex with you.
Being bipolar will let you get twice the work done. :)

I liked how you opened and then closed it with the same thought. Bringing that thought full circle.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Cherrie Palmer

9 Months Ago

It was the best/ only choice.
Dead Alive Dave

9 Months Ago

I could agree more, but it'd be weird.
Cherrie Palmer

9 Months Ago

I know that is scary a twilight zone moment for sure.

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