There is 4 of Them

There is 4 of Them

A Poem by Davidgeo
"

and one of them you cannot touch

"
you cannot meet me 
at a place without a time
or really be anyone at all
in a time without a place
of the four of them
they are all my favorite
of the four of them 
the up and down of them
of what we live embedded in
to the left and the right of us
from the four of them
out from the in behind's of me
upon me then from 
the straight ahead's of me
there is always something
i just cannot grasp
something 
almost constantly in passing
something
i always see it
something
just behind of me 
and then right there 
just in front of me
but never quite, right here
 
mostly like a memory
i still always feel it
but never just, right now
sorta like a prediction 
that can never happen
something always never
quite really anything
anywhere at all ever
(right now)
like the whisper
of a dream
quietly passing
in an instant
through the dead of night
(right here)

© 2018 Davidgeo


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I greatly enjoyed this piece. It put me in mind of an Celtic knot, never beginning, never ending, but always managing to start where ever your eyes happens to land and completing just behind. What a wonderful topsy-turvy ride through the, "almost got it.... nope, don't go it" realm of the mind. Expectional!

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Davidgeo

5 Years Ago

The "almost got it... nope, don't got it" realm was what I was going for. Thanks for the review.



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Wow now that moves. This poem a is head Turner. I loved it start to finish my brain was engaged

Posted 5 Years Ago


I like the idea behind this poem, and you have some great imagery. But, there is always a but ahah, I found that the intermittent lines really threw me for a loop and I wasn't able to grasp the entire intention of the poem unfortunately. Despite this, I did like your content and imagery. Well done :)

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Davidgeo

5 Years Ago

Thanks for your honest review.

I think you might be on to something when you mentio.. read more
I greatly enjoyed this piece. It put me in mind of an Celtic knot, never beginning, never ending, but always managing to start where ever your eyes happens to land and completing just behind. What a wonderful topsy-turvy ride through the, "almost got it.... nope, don't go it" realm of the mind. Expectional!

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Davidgeo

5 Years Ago

The "almost got it... nope, don't got it" realm was what I was going for. Thanks for the review.
This whole thing was a great example of how to do a mystery poem.
great job.

-Richard

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Davidgeo

5 Years Ago

How do you mean?
Richard McLin

5 Years Ago

There seems to be a lot of things said, but not really answered.

A lot of hidden thin.. read more
Davidgeo

5 Years Ago

That's about right. It was about perception, our place in it and it's limits. I see perception as .. read more
The ending was strong - "Through the dead of night." Gave it a mysterious sensation. Nice write :)

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Davidgeo

5 Years Ago

Thanks man. You look like you work for one of the top three drug cartels in Mexico.
guy drori

5 Years Ago

Lol well thanks, i'll take that as a compliment I think

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