Storm

Gloomy clouds,

Pouring tears,

Booming thunder,

Crackling lighting,

Hail cascading upon earth,

Rising winds of Aeolus,

I stand there in the middle of the storm,

Taking in the beauty of

Nature’s most destructive forces,

Feared by some,

Enjoyed by others,

Strong breezes of wind blow

Against thy face,

Taking in the comfort

Of the raging storm

Author's Note

is it good and does it need editing? what do you think about it?

Reviews

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A very inspired poem here, Gregory. Nature is quite stimulating, isn't she? :) I also feel a comfort in a raging storm. Reminds me of a greater power and puts things back into perspective I think :) I enjoyed reading your art, and welcome to the Cafe.

[Tate Morgan]

I liked this it speaks of the thrills of nature that we are bound to endure and helpless to change .There is great beauty in nature.

[Rachael Nelson]

I like the poem its nice and makes me think I can hear the storm as I read it.

[C. Rose]

Yay Aeolus :)

Why did you capitalize Clouds, but not the second words of the other two word lines?
The "thy" threw me. In my opinion, I wouldn't wait for the end of the poem to mention there is someone other than you experiencing the storm. - Are the pouring tears meant to double as a description of the storm and of 'thy'. Maybe I read into that too much - but if true 1 - cool 2 - add emphasis.

I enjoy a good storm. You included both perspectives and by beginning with rapid fire two word descriptors you quickly set an aggressive scene.

Well done.
Nice to meet you :)

[GTTaylor]

Loved it, it has a really nice pace to it

[Pryde Foltz]

Strong breezes of wind blow

Against thy face,

Taking in the comfort

Of the raging storm

So true, Gregory and storm is cathartic. Great write.

[Shaquana Adams]

I wrote a poem similar to this, but about rain. I really like this poem :)