4 AM

4 AM

A Poem by Jesus & Gypsy Soul

4am & this night runs wild
Burdened by my thoughts cus I'm just not tired
This poem's about the time the girl caught fire
Screaming for the desire
To desire anything at all.

© Copyright June 2016 Elizabeth Eberhardt All Rights Reserved

© 2016 Jesus & Gypsy Soul


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Hi, Lady Fellow-Texan! : )
It's just Richard, come to check out some of your excellent poetry.
Just couldn't go to sleep, eh? ; )
I particularly enjoyed this piece, Elizabeth, most especially for its open honesty and for how it expresses deep need, frustration at not sating it, aching and yearning for satisfaction … even to simply feel the alluring depths of desire.
Free Style poetry can really pull the reader with you into your moment when penned as brilliantly as this wee proportioned verse does me … brings the olde saw, "dynamite comes in small packages" entirely to life.

Love the well-placed tease of rhymes, too! : )
Thank you, M'Lady, for sharing such an appealing part of You! ⁓ Richard

Posted 7 Years Ago


Jesus & Gypsy Soul

7 Years Ago

Dynamite comes in small packages, huh? Quite the compliment! Thank you for the wonderful review, Ri.. read more
Richard🖌

7 Years Ago

Yes, it is tough when a lady longs for desire, but it just won't come … whom could sleep with such.. read more
Desire gives birth to life. A small poem about girl's insomnia.

Posted 7 Years Ago


I really like this because of its short length. It's like a little glimpse into insomnia at four in the morning. The last two lines are really lovely and, even if it's short, it conveys a lot of emotion and longing.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Jesus & Gypsy Soul

7 Years Ago

Thank you! Originally, I tossed this. But I had kept replaying the words in my mind for months and i.. read more

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Jesus & Gypsy Soul
Jesus & Gypsy Soul

San Antonio, TX



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