This cold night

This cold night

A Poem by Charles Konsor
"

just a cold (and lonely) night where too many things arise in my brain.

"

Cold hard rains
fall on northwest nights
and a heart...no, a body
too lonely, too long
he walks slow, then fast,
then slow.

He imagines things going wrong,
and then imagines a hundred things
going right

Where she is outside his apartment
A long speech prepared
And he says no, not now
Later
Now I don't care
Now I need a friend

Someone to count the seconds
As the bamboo sheets slowly exhale
Drop upon our bodies
Outline our shapes
Feet which intertwine
over and over

Up the body it moves
hips, hands, lips.

Ahh, but dreams.
The soundtrack of soft rain
Yes, it's soft now.

And I search photos for deceit
for worth
for anything that will give me a glimpse of you
and your character.

And rambling on I go
Pathetic, alone, boring
Like the dreams of friends
It's hard to care
but I'll write it still
Because I care
Because someday you cared

Someday you walked a little slower
A little faster
You played out scenes with her
You pretended she would come upon  you
Any moment now
See you as you were
Romantic, simple, real, you

Yes, I dream
Yes, you dreamt
And on lonely nights we comb through scenes
Life lived without us
With us.
Where did it go wrong?

It didn't
It just is
And tommorrow night
One drink too many
And the same dreams return
 


© 2015 Charles Konsor



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This is so wonderful and flowing.
I realy liked these words here.

"Ahh, but dreams.
The soundtrack of soft rain
Yes, it's soft now."

You can write a wonderful passionate write.
I liek at the end where you say the same
dreams return. Quite cute really.
An enjoyable read from you Charles.
I hope to read more from you.


Posted 9 Years Ago


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This is a lovely atmospheric and passionate poem. Some really good lines and I really liked the ending. What dreams may come if the drink were omitted?

Posted 7 Years Ago



This piece was nice, but lost some of its power near the end. I am not quite sure why.

1. And I search photos for deceit - for worth
2. You pretended she would come upon you - Any moment now

Stil a heck of a lot of good lines.



Posted 7 Years Ago


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This is so wonderful passionate
and sincere. I really enjoyed this write.

Posted 7 Years Ago


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I like this. Very pretty writting.

Posted 7 Years Ago


She is just a dream, Charles,
but you knew that, and you pursue
her and think about her until
you have another night and another
drink and you must again have your dream.
Go to sleep , Charles.
Here she is, outside in the rain and you
dream that you must ask her in, it is cold.
Goodnight Charles---- and her.
----- John

Posted 7 Years Ago


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You are a very awesome writer Charles.
I loved yoru last staza the best.
Lovely read. You seem to have heart and soul
in what you write. Amazing!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Very awesome. Cheers! :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


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Posted 7 Years Ago


like this really much !!! amzing writing :)

Posted 7 Years Ago



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Charles Konsor

Portland, OR



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