The Garden

The Garden

A Poem by Morgan Storms
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This is a poem I wrote for a contest. Where we have to describe a color without saying the name of the color. So let me know if anyone can guess the color. I kind of went with the violet/purple/blue

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As we walk the garden's path
We are free from yesterday's dueling wrath
We see such precious blossoms
That were tended with such care
As we enjoy the lavender flavored air
We linger on purpose there and here
We saw such iris beauties
And your favorite forget-me-not cuties
You showed me sweet affection
And I vowed you my forever protection
We laughed and we spoke until the
Morning glories folded to sleep
And your eyes began to weep
However, I made my promise
whether at land or sea
You will always be with me




© 2013 Morgan Storms



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This is a sweet one. The only suggestion I have is to perhaps consider a break into verses... in the first few lines you speak in present tense and then you go to past tense. Perhaps a break there would serve as a mental pivot to another part/perspective of the garden and the path.... and then you have the nice ending to bring it back full circle to the present. I like that

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Morgan Storms

4 Years Ago

I just read it over and I didn't even realize that I switched from past to present tense! Thanks for.. read more



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what a visually beautiful write filled with sweet thoughts. excellent poem!

Posted 3 Years Ago


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Morgan Storms

3 Years Ago

I appreciate you reading.
Violet, Purple, and blue...three shades of dear.

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Morgan Storms

3 Years Ago

Thank you. :)
I like the last two lines. I think it flows better as a single verse. The poems felt like honey to me.

I like.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Morgan Storms

3 Years Ago

Thank you FrancescaX. I appreciate your reading!
FrancescaX

3 Years Ago

you are welcome
A beautiful journey you took me with you in the poem. I like the places you took me and the ending.
"However, I made my promise
whether at land or sea
You will always be with me"
The above words are promises made to be kept. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

Posted 3 Years Ago


Morgan Storms

3 Years Ago

Thank you so much! And thank you for stopping by and reading!
This is a sweet one. The only suggestion I have is to perhaps consider a break into verses... in the first few lines you speak in present tense and then you go to past tense. Perhaps a break there would serve as a mental pivot to another part/perspective of the garden and the path.... and then you have the nice ending to bring it back full circle to the present. I like that

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Morgan Storms

4 Years Ago

I just read it over and I didn't even realize that I switched from past to present tense! Thanks for.. read more
I enjoyed the walk thrugh this beautiful
garden. Your tender vocabulary brings
joy with smiles to the exciting colors
along the path.
Thank you for a delidous treat.
---- Eagle Cruagh

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Morgan Storms

4 Years Ago

Thank you very much.
"We laughed and we spoke until the
Morning glories folded to sleep."

I love the word choice here. Simply lovely. :)


Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Morgan Storms

4 Years Ago

Thanks Blue!
Ah , simple things in life bring the most pleasure, as the lovers' walk in the garden ............ v nice poem Morgan.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Morgan Storms

4 Years Ago

Thanks for reading! :)
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That was very beautiful Morgan very beautiful! I loved this part, And your favorite forget me not cuties :) That made me smile real big there! I stop saving poems to put in the ole library,Id rather place them in my heart with all the others cause there I know there kept safe and sound,So yeah theres one to lock away my friend:)

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Morgan Storms

4 Years Ago

Thank you. I was reading it over and I think that it could use some polishing, but I am thankful tha.. read more
FEA

4 Years Ago

Well I saw all the colors and was truly beautiful to me I wouldn't change a thing gosh its too good .. read more

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Added on October 7, 2013
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Tags: Garden, flowers, love, kiss, color

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Morgan Storms
Morgan Storms

Sedona, AZ



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