To the Life I live

To the life I live
I never fully understood you
But with the life I was given
How could I?
It's always a constant thought
Who am I? Why am I? Am I sought?
And I do believe there is thee
Who made us
prayed us
That gave me----
And tonight I feel sound
Expressing myself
 as I should be
Lucky
That I am found

Reviews

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A very tasteful and relevant piece that speaks to me as a writer and poet, you sense of determination is like a breath of fresh air, if i were your editor I would suggest these subtle change, remember just suggest.

To the life I lead,
I never understood you.
With the life I was given,
How could I?
It's always a constant thought,
Who am I? What am I? Am I sought?
And I do believe there is that
Which made us
prayed us
That gave me----
And tonight I feel sound
Expressing myself
as I ought to be
Lucky!
That I am found

[therisa]

Sigh.

A
Thought
Or two
Where hope is
Not a four letter word
But reality.

Light is
The inner truth
Which we seek
Never realizing it.

Thank you
For reminding
During my dreary days
Of winter.

[Morgan Storms]

Thanks for the review.

[therisa]

your welcome.

[Michael Kevin Spencer]

You have a quizzical style Morgan, have you written anything recently?

[Morgan Storms]

I am working on some things. But I have not finished anything yet. It's one of those writer's block times...I actually love reading on here because it helps get me writing.

[Michael Kevin Spencer]

Yes that it does, just to be with other writers sometimes helps.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like this piece too...but i agree with Thomas...the changes would make it tighter...and the pace is better with less words...bouncier...and gets the idea across a bit better..subtle changes to this good piece makes it even better.

jacob

[Craig Froman]

What a wonderful glimpse into your heart and soul.. that core of who you are... We all must listen and learn from your words and come to appreciate our distinctive voice. Beautiful confession!

[Pedro3]

very nice ^_^ asking the big questions i liked the ending like just ending the cliff with a free fall, the one suggestion would be make it last because its good and could extrapolate into a larger master piece.