Maximus

Me Philosophy

Maximus, my alter ego listen to the symphonious cheers of the crowd, which have gathered from all corners of the universe to witness your grandeur.

With less than a smile you have effortlessly charmed Kings and Queens alike, you've captured the heart of the unconquerable, even the gods are envious of your bequest.

Oh! Maximus only if the world could see the myriad of demons that accompanies your greatness.

Reviews

[Syke]

Some quick grammar fixes for you:
Are you sure you meant bequest? It kinda fits, but it just seems odd. Bequest btw refers to something in a will, the passing on of something, bequeathing something, etc.

I like the ending line, it's nice, simple, but it opens up a myriad of possibilities in interpreting the other lines. The poem reads a tad bit clunkily, at first it seems you might mean listens, not listen, and I actually had to double check that line. I'm interested what the inspiration was, there are quite a few possibilities. Overall I'd say it's a decent poem, prose, but none-the-less poetry.

[Sseoni]

Wow! Awesome poem! Great use and variety of words! I loved it! :D

[Cherrie Palmer]

your words are strong and full of bravado a great synopis for a story to follow.
I enjoyed the imagery, very nice.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Quintus Fabius Maximus I could relate to; the Roman Consul, since part of my name comes from him. He fought Hannibal in the Punic Wars. Great hero stuff here.

[justjenn_2u]

Almost as a speech to penetrate the subconscious mind. Intoxicating words reel the reader in, longing to see Maximus.

Good job!

[A Lost Man Found]

woooooooooooowwwwwww! (in the words of every coffe-shop stoner) : dude thats heavy.