There's only one thing I'm afraid of, and that is

There's only one thing I'm afraid of, and that is

A Story by Valkyrie Warrior
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There's only one thing I'm afraid of, and that is...

Vampires

But there's no way to avoid them and if I don’t get what daddy needs he'll kill me.

But they might kill me.

I turned down the driveway leading a large house. I could hear the blood pumping in my ears, and I bet they could to. The glass bottles clinked in my pocket. I saw one, sitting on the porch. It didn’t move as I approached. It was looking into the garden and I could see its profile in the moonlight. It was a man, with a straight lined nose and a strong jaw with full lips and dark hair. I stepped on the porch and stopped.

This wasn’t the Vampire I came to see.

I took two steps back as the man rose.

“Hello” he said his voice was very smooth, “You must be the little V collector”.

 I turned and ran.

Of course he was faster than me.

I felt the pain as his fangs met my throat and I felt the scream tear my lungs

I wonder if daddy will mind if I don’t get home tonight.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Nov 27, 2014

       

     

     

     

     

    © 2015 Valkyrie Warrior


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    A few typos
    "there no way to avoid"
    "we will kill me"
    "they could to"

    You have a very readable and engaging voice (of course he was faster than me)
    I like the ending - that the child is more concerned about her father than death.
    Perhaps the one fear is her father, not the vampire.

    I challenge you to add more emotion (terror, sadness, pain) in between the second to last and the last line.

    Posted 9 Years Ago


    1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

    Valkyrie Warrior

    9 Years Ago

    Thank you very much. Oops I will fix them :S



    Reviews

    A few typos
    "there no way to avoid"
    "we will kill me"
    "they could to"

    You have a very readable and engaging voice (of course he was faster than me)
    I like the ending - that the child is more concerned about her father than death.
    Perhaps the one fear is her father, not the vampire.

    I challenge you to add more emotion (terror, sadness, pain) in between the second to last and the last line.

    Posted 9 Years Ago


    1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

    Valkyrie Warrior

    9 Years Ago

    Thank you very much. Oops I will fix them :S
    A very good short story. You create possibility, danger and realness. I like the logical tone in the words. A sad ending to the tale or is it more? Thank you for sharing the short story.
    Coyote

    Posted 9 Years Ago


    Coyote Poetry

    9 Years Ago

    That is very good. I'm off to sleep. I work the night shift. Please send read requests. I will as so.. read more
    Valkyrie Warrior

    9 Years Ago

    Ok Night Night.
    Valkyrie Warrior

    9 Years Ago

    Please read my story, Escape!

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