Abuse

Abuse

A Poem by Valkyrie Warrior
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Why do I do this to him.....

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Baby I love you, remember that

Easy does it, don’t lose your temper                            

 

 

God it hurts, baby please stop

Everyone asks where the bruises come from

No, no please

Too much, too much pain

Let go I can’t breathe

Everything broken

© 2015 Valkyrie Warrior


Author's Note

Valkyrie Warrior
I felt like some more acrostics needed to be written

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That was great! The simplicity of the acrostic was great! I would've been better with maybe a few more acrostics, but it was really good!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Valkyrie Warrior

8 Years Ago

"better with a few more acrostics" ????? Not sure what you mean by this but ok, thanks for the revie.. read more
What a fun exercise that you gave a dark little twist, its compelling for the reader and I think the ending is the most beautiful part.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Valkyrie Warrior

8 Years Ago

Oh thanks!!!!
Gripping and great story telling. I feel like it didn't need to be a acrostic to get the point across, but its a great piece.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Valkyrie Warrior

8 Years Ago

Thank you!!!
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Posted 8 Years Ago


Dion [MFMDM]

8 Years Ago

Sorry for not giving an exact critique. Yes it was good, it just made me feel a certain way for the.. read more
Valkyrie Warrior

8 Years Ago

Well then thank you very much!!
Dion [MFMDM]

8 Years Ago

No problem
good idea highlighting the first letter of each line
it really helps the reader focus on the poem

also, its more like dialogue than some poems
which i was impressed by

really poignant


-Dream

Posted 8 Years Ago


Valkyrie Warrior

8 Years Ago

Thank you very much Dream!!
closed

8 Years Ago

youre welcome
glad to review
Valkyrie Warrior

8 Years Ago

:-)............
Being a gentle is great and close to the God.
Very brilliantly done the job dear.
Acrostic is work of fun and some creative formation, it is one of them.

Posted 8 Years Ago


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Valkyrie Warrior

8 Years Ago

Thank you very much Saddam

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Added on May 9, 2015
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