bur r rat tat burr

Onomatopoeia and imagery

Broom, vroom, zoom, 

bur r rat tat burr

I like the antiquity of sounds like these. 

How they remind me of plump dresses and red stained teeth. 

All the baroque celebrations, 

decadence in its decay, 

Its this huge hurrah and gallant saturation of pleasures and sins.

Reviews

[Davidgeo]

Well then... you're not just a pretty picture.

That's good raw writing. You're a poet I would say.

(red teeth come from red wine or raw meat)

[kitty blur]

i got some nice images from this. the 'decadence in its decay' was my favorite, i'm a sucker for cute alliterations. you have a different style than other poems that i've seen on here, and i like it. :)

[Wolf_Lord]

Hmmm... Obscure, yet relevant. Tawdry yet prim. Short but Sweet... Lol, I like it. Wolf_Lord ,'', ^@@^ ,'',

[LostBoy]

Cool one. Like your word choice.

[Relic]

This seems to have New Orleans written all over it. But that's just my mind wondering through those decadent and sinful places.

I like it.

[Veronica Staehle]

New Orleans? What an exciting comparison, definitely decadent and sinful. Thanks for reading over here and your kind words!

[Relic]

My pleasure.

[The Twin Arenas]

Plump dresses and red stained teeth.

Reads like a Fourth of July parade re-animated.

"Plump dresses" is great.

[Veronica Staehle]

Thank you! Its that fancy dressed, red wine drank type of celebrating. Forth of July parade is very plausible. I appreciate your read and words!

[The Twin Arenas]

re-animated like shadowy corporations do with the dead.