Like so many others.

Like so many others.

A Poem by Lucien Maier
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one more for the cafe

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I have spent countless hours arranging words into stories and poems.
Like so many others.
I set my goal, to make an impact on the future with those words.
Like so many others.

Many pens stop there,
they don’t commit to the story.
Or they worry about rejection.
Or their words are so close to their heart they can't let them loose.

Unlike so many others,
I pushed my words out into the world.
Even though I didn’t believe, I knew I could not hide.

Unlike so many others,
My words spread, all over the world.
Making their way into every country,
read by people in many stations.

But unlike the few,
the fire did not spark.
The stories never took hold.

Its a long known fact that stories spread because people love them.
Because when one reads a story that truly touches them,
They will tell all their friends “You must read this.”

but unlike the few,
My stories did not touch deep enough,
My pen can not make mouths move.

so
Like so many others.
I failed.

Unlike the many
I gain some small comfort,
That I did not hide.
I ripped my chest open and let the words flow to the page.
and then through all the fear and anxiety.
I set each piece out on its own in the wide world.

Since I tried, I know.
My heart was strong enough to take the risk.
My skin tough enough to take the critics.
My words were honest and true,
But my words were not good enough……..

The rest of my work is at

http://lucienmaier.com/



© 2015 Lucien Maier



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Lucien Maier
one more for the cafe

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"Or they worry about rejection.
Or their words are so close to their heart they can't let them loose."

This hit very close to home for me. I grew up with an African mom so, expressing emotion is kind of a no-no in African culture (something I've never agreed with). So, when I first started writing, it was a huge struggle for me to be honest and raw in my work...cause I was so afraid of being vulnerable. But now, as I've started my blog here and posting writing that I want to write, that bears my soul and feelings, I'm noticing so many positive response's from people. Also, some of my favorite writers are super raw and emotionally driven, so they inspire me a lot. This is a really important topic and I'm glad you covered it.



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"Or they worry about rejection.
Or their words are so close to their heart they can't let them loose."

This hit very close to home for me. I grew up with an African mom so, expressing emotion is kind of a no-no in African culture (something I've never agreed with). So, when I first started writing, it was a huge struggle for me to be honest and raw in my work...cause I was so afraid of being vulnerable. But now, as I've started my blog here and posting writing that I want to write, that bears my soul and feelings, I'm noticing so many positive response's from people. Also, some of my favorite writers are super raw and emotionally driven, so they inspire me a lot. This is a really important topic and I'm glad you covered it.



Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Xppressed real quintessential with ur words ☺

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is beautiful! That is all I can say!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sad. We all feel like this. Or I do. haha.

I've seen such differing reactions to my writing... from "You are the worst writer ever." To people saying things that made me seem like I was amazing. So, it's hard to take anything seriously that people tell me.

I agree with continuing to write. At some point, I realized I would write no matter what. It's life. It would be nice to get renown, but it's tough. It's not only about being good, but I think being good is a part of it. Being good as in... being what people think is good at that moment.

Think about when people read your writing they are in a certain mind state. We want to believe that our writing is so good that it can rip people out of whatever, but not everyone will be impacted.

Song, art, etc, all of those things have more ability to immediately impact; writing requires the reader to do more work. Just some thoughts. Stick around tho.

Hard work is a beautiful thing, even if you don't succeed. That's why there is God.

Edit: Also, for better or worse, this community is more about making friends and chummily posting one line comments on pieces, than actually reading and reviewing.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Your words are so profoundly personal, yet somehow speak into all of us. Words, how they inspire us, allude us, run from us when we need them most. So glad you share yours here.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

inspirational! Oh, how I can relate to this poem.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

nice words .. i can relate strongly to this .. it's like you re talking about me .

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I can identify with this so much, so many works saved in some file, rejected by some mag or not read by anyone who can help. You have captured the writer's struggle perfectly, well done.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Many pens stop there,
they don’t commit to the story.

I can relate to this so well that I grinned when I came across it. I always have trouble staying "faithful" to my projects; one idea becomes a new story, and another.... but they all remain unfinished.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Even though the last line evokes hurt, I must say this poem radiates strength and power. I read the second-last stanza, and the voice in my head was loud and clear, belonging to a man proud of himself and his efforts. I loved the usage of the words 'like' and 'unlike'. Very cleverly put.

I see the poet as a soldier - bruised and scarred but alive. Self-doubt is the biggest weakness. You overcame that and let your powerful words out for the world to read and store in their hearts. If you found within yourself the courage to do that, you have already succeeded.

Have a great day. :)

- Rhea Xx.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lucien Maier

2 Years Ago

thanks very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review.
Would love to have it .. read more

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