Who Am I...?

A girl walked up to her father

With what seemed like a simple question

She looked at him and asked

"Who am I?"

He smiled down at her and ruffled her hair

"You are Antonia Gabrielle Jones"

She thanked him and walked away

Her thoughts whirling around in her head

That is my name... but who am I?

She walked to her best friend's house

When she knocked on the door her friend answered and she asked

"Who am I?"

Her friend looked confused and hugged her

"You are the girl I go to when I need someone to talk to"

She thanked her friend and walked away

Her thoughts whirling around in her head

 

 

 

 

She continued her walk and came across her boyfriend and asked

"Who am I?"

He kissed her forehead and held her hands

"You are the girl of my dreams and the one I love"

She thanked him and walked away

Her thoughts whirling around in her head

That is what he sees me as... but who am I?

 

She went back home and up to her room to find a girl staring at her so she asked

"Who am I?"

The girl just stared back with big, sad eyes

"You are a girl who is always their for her friends and family.

Who does what she thinks is right and tries to help others do the same.

Who everyone loves and cares for"

She reached out to touch the girl and found

The girl who knew her best was the girl in the mirror

Reviews

[Bullet Soul]

Wow, I love this! At first I was like "I wonder why there is a random girl in her room." But then when I realized it was herself, I thought, ohhhh, how cool! Really nicely written poem, it tells a great story, and what the girl in your poem realizes is definitely true. A great read, from an obviously great writer!

[�Alexa�]

I loved it! Great job!!!!

[Sumit Kumar Gupta]

Its Just so good! I would really like to steal your source of inspiration; This has such a griming piece of your dark side! well is this poem based on a true happenings or you just came up to create one!But I really enjoyed it!

[DeathByChoice]

This is really true, a lot of people could just list parts of you they know or like, but they can never tell you who you really are.
This is really well written and I like how there's repitition, like "She asked 'Who am I'" and "She thanked them and walked away, her thoughts whirling around in her head" It makes it so catchy and nice.
Keep it up, a lot of people wouldn't normally write about this sort of topic, and it's nice you chose to!

[Amanda Naomi]

ahhh...i love third person!

it seems that you face a hard question: "who am i" it is one that even the best of people sometimes cannot answer, and it is up to you to find out. like you said, "The girl who knew her best was the girl in the mirror"

i encourage you to dig deeper into who you are! keep writing and keep asking "who am i"! i am intrigued to find out what you come up with...let me know if you ever do!