YELLOW BIRD

a love, a bearer of joy

everything

is what you are to me

without you I am

nothing for

my body is a gift

to you

do with it as you please

it does not

hurt

a bruise from a feather you

are so delicate in

my hands I fear

for you

for the control you possess

that I can so easily

break

crush

in the very hands that

adore your intricacy

 

you can’t fly with

broken wings

Reviews

[Hari Om]

With broken wings u try to fly
Singing melancholy strains ....
Such a wonderful one....very very very nice

[Bare trees]

At first read, some may think it is about the physical power that a person can exude on something so much smaller than them if they wanted. But to me, the fact that your intentions are good and loving shows the real strength you posses.

[Willard Wells]

Nice imagery and flow. Very nice.

[lua]

thank you :)

[Valentine]

Had a white dove for years. During the years I had seizures he would start cooing loudly and jumping around in his cage. I soon learned he knew I was going into a seizure before I did. If he could have flown free, I would have let him. Valentine

[lua]

wow, that's such an incredible connection you had with your dove, it shows how beneficial animals are to human life, really remarkable, thank you so much for reading and sharing! :)

[Lovecraft]

Happy and melancholic all at once, good job sewing those feelings into one.

[lua]

thank you :)

[Lovecraft]

Yeah, it's usually hard to combine those two emotions. Good job.

[Abdur-Rehman Qadeer]

wowww..... I wish I could write a long comment on it... but I just have no words worthy of it...

[lua]

thank you :)

[Brokensoul]

Vulnerability - be of the heart, mind, a baby or bird - is described succinctly in this beautiful poem.

[lua]

thank you :)

[Adam Adams]

quite interesting. in the of yellow-birds, i can clearly sense the so-called "intricacy" of love-birds as well. very deep, & captivating work here.

looking forward to readin' ur work!

[lua]

thank you :)

[Sonakshi Arora]

This is my favourite one, definitely!

[lua]

i'm so glad you enjoyed reading it :)

[Sonakshi Arora]

:) do feel free to check out mine. You write so well ! I am in complete awe.

[Earl Schumacker]

Hi Lua,

This is an enjoyable read and well crafted poem. I like the images you evoke with your conservation of language. Nicely done. Keep up the good work. Earl

[lua]

thank you so much for reading, i really appreciate your comment :)