dressed to the nines

the day is done, my dear, in your diamond studded dress

hey Bloody Mary, dressed in red

she may be pretty, it’s her eyes that said

“stare deeper darling, what do you see?”

a black-scale cobra, coming for me

eyes like diamond, skin like gold

when she falls a little, it’s her ropes that show

she gets a lot of heat but she’s playing for keeps

her ice cream melts to the coldest beat

hey little baby, dressed in black

a sleek white runner on a government track

a pretty little purchase paid with an act

sit down baby, there’s no going back

i heard her dice melt, shatter like glass

it takes a long time, tracing the path

she had a pitch black wedding, going too fast

the ballroom floor was a thing of the past

hey Bloody Mary, dressed in red

her eyes still shine but she's as good as dead

a nice tall glass, cracked down the back

her little white crime paid twice as bad

she pulled her dress on, dancing to Stones

she dimmed the lights down, Sympathy drones

not a head in this place isn't a waste

there goes a cool dark lady covered lace

i heard her cards burn, covered in ash

i felt her heart learn, this is the past

a long light shadow leaving the door

a deep red stain on my dining room floor

Author's Note

I like the E.E. Cumming's style of everything being in lowercase. Except I wanted some things to stand out, so they became uppercase. This poem was really fun.

Reviews

[MADAM]

Im a bit confused.. could you please explain to me what this poem is actually about XD From what I get its some sort of betrayal between two lovers and one dies, but Im honestly not getting this poem at all. Ill probably feel stupid once you explain it, but for some reason things aren clicking in my head XD I'm so sorry.

[Aura Inanna]

I wrote it vaguely so it could be interpreted as whatever the reader imagined while reading it, so even I don't remember a lot of what I intended. I know that it starts with a girl whose luck was amazing, so she did dangerous things but her luck ran out (dice shattered, cards burnt, glass cracked–all euphemisms for bad luck) and she ended up having to sell herself for money, got married to one of her clients, and killed him for his money. I think, but no promises really. What do you think?

[MADAM]

I did get the vibe of prostitution lurking there, but I wasn't sure if I should have mentioned it. I didn't get the bad and good luck though XD I think thats where my theory branches of from the intended one. I saw it more as a murder story. Mary seems to have ben married by force, she was unhappy, and eventually killed him (the last line telling me so) I get this because a lot of things point to her being extremely unhappy and the references to marriage make it seem as if she is in an unhappy relationship. Her eyes tell of her hate and disdain for her current life, thats why she's "as good as dead"

[Aura Inanna]

I like that idea of it. I didn't really see the relationship as necessarily unhappy, though. She definitely hates her life, but the marriage is more just in the way. A "little white crime," if you will. Your interpretation makes a lot of sense though.

[MADAM]

haha, I see where your coming from though so its ok^^) My poetry is similar in the way that its hard to get, so far no one has gotten the interpretations close to what I intended XD (on the specific ones that actually have a right way to interpret, not all of mine do, just some that actually have a certain meaning behind it)

[Aura Inanna]

That's really cool. :) I love poetry like that. Thanks for the conversation!

[MADAM]

No problem ^^) anytime haha

[Evita]

Dark. I like the rhythm which the rhyming contributes to, and how it never seems to overpower the story in the poem. Yet I am still not sure if I know what has happened. "Dressed to kill?"

[Aura Inanna]

Thanks for the great review. I'm not sure myself what happened. Her good luck brought bad luck on her, I think.

[zainul]

Wonderfully written rhymed poem.

[Mia]

"when she falls a little, it’s her ropes that show"
Firstly I really like that line, it stood out for me!
The last stanza for me was the best especially the last two lines. Wonderful write and I enjoyed it!

[Rob Santana]

Hey I didn't notice that this piece is all in lowercase, that is cool!!! I've never read anything like this before, something different. I really enjoyed reading this, well written.

[Aura Inanna]

Thank you so much. :)