Sightless Cycle

This is for the "Surreal As It Gets" writing contest. I found that contest and figured I might as well enter, since I felt like writing some anyway. ;) ~Aura

Heartbreaking argentine winds
fly across my vision and dapple it with stars.
But what vision was there
when all I could have seen was things I already saw?

Trees blended with the colors of the ocean,
for to float gently on the reflections of clouds in the water.
And the clouds unstick themselves from the water
and create cotton candy swirls splattering the lavender pavement.
Those cotton candy swirls burn holes in the pavement
through which silver foxes crawl with diamond black eyes trained on the sky.
Their eyes shine on the azure sky into windows
that see through to the abyss of space to create midnight clouds.
Midnight clouds with which dances the silver winds of earlier
blocking the vision to make the clouds white
and also to make them reflect upon the water.

Completing the cycle.

Author's Note

This is for a contest so I'm hoping for some good feedback if possible. (And maybe a wish of luck? ;D Nah, you don't have to. <3) ~Aura

Reviews

[Kenneth The Poet]

Surreal for sure. Nice work, I like it much.

[a]

I love the personification of all those inanimate objects. Non-living things were the subjects of actions (very nice verbs, by the way) and that made the imagery surreal.
Creative idea and great poem!

[Ruth]

And diamonds shimmer through this surreal trail! I LOVE it! Wonderfully surreal indeed....one to think over long after its read...so cool! xx