Wishing Well

A poem about human suffering and hope... and how futile the latter can be.

With heavy heart and sorrowed soul

a shadowed path I walk alone,

Upon my mind a single goal

to barter with a wall of stone,

Many a dream and fear it`s kept

and many to it a coin have chucked,

I tread the last remaining step

and from my pocket a penny pluck,

I tell of hurt and pain and fear,

of cruelty, death, and war,

The loss of things once held most dear

now shamefully ignored,

I tell of ignorance and lies,

decete and broken word,

of harm humanity denies,

all the things that I`ve endured,

I pause but for a moment there

as sadness turns to rage,

The cruelty that once thought was rare

now constantley engaged,

"Curse you penny, curse you well,

no longer do I wish to dwell!

Speak my story far and wide!"

and into it my penny fell,

but alas, I know, he'll never tell...

Reviews

[Cody Wiggins]

oh man i really liked it it was awesome very well done

[Loribeth215]

I like this... the analogy of secrets between the person who wishes, the coin, and the well. It's very good.

[Hoshi Nami]

it's interesting i couldn't guess where you were going with it- i really like the beginning it has a lot more emotion and mystery to it than the end bit. good job.
(also in the first line i think you want to say heart not hear)

[Morgie W.]

Very nice. It's kind of hard to follow, confusing and such, but once you start to understand through out the middle of the poem, it starts to show what you mean, and it shows emotion. =) Sorry I can type no more, I'm a very small-minded child who barely thinks that much. x)