Carpe Noctem

In darkness, I come alive

All my fears escape my mind

Within the glow on the moon

Skin glows highlighting the dark shape

Muscles surge as the strength returns

The crisp, cool air enters clear nasal passages

The once listless body has risen

Nothing can touch me in the dark

For I am free to do as I wish

Walking among the lost souls

As if an invisible power protects

Seeing deep into their empty void

Laughter is interrupted by emotions of pity

Tides of the moon sped time quickly

With little motion, they have all but stopped

Exposing their souls, naked and ashamed

Reaching out almost touching their sins

The river of people slows and thins

Late is the hour as they run to slumber

As the dark loses the battle to light

I slowly return to the shadows

No more can be taken for the past night

Author's Note

This is still raw and need to be proofed

Reviews

[J.J. Matthews]

I think this was a very interesting piece. I'm not one to stick around for too long so this would definitely be a favourite of mine. Also, the way I read it in my head placed me in a series of dark and yet fascinating scenes. I especially liked your line "the crisp, cool air enters clear nasal passages", giving the reader, not only something to see but trying to give a better sensory experience whilst reading. Although, I have to say the poem was somewhat scattered as I wasn't sure where each sentence was heading in terms of the premise to the poetry, but then that was one of my favourite aspects of it. Excellent work!

[Michael Wright]

Thank you for taking the time to review. This is actually my favorite piece to date. What you have expressed is what I was looking to achieve.

[jjulienne88]

Quite Beautiful! I didn't feel too raw at all, nice poem. THANKS

[~]

A vivid description including all senses. I like the play on words with the title. :D

[wordman]

a spirit of the night,creative write,could see this as a up coming novel or even a series

[Michael Wright]

This is my favorite piece Thank you for the complements. I havent considered this to work to a novel or anything else

[BLitZeD]

nice bro, bio said your a novice? how long you been writing now? ....and i really like that i have to go google the title of this cuz idk wtf that means lol good work tho

[Michael Wright]

I actually took writing more seriously last year so yes still a novice
Thank you for you review

[Jess Rose]

I totally relate to this! Well done!!

[Michael Wright]

Thank you for your review

[Sami Khalil]

Very reaching poem even in the darkness and that of the souls. Excellent delivery and descriptions. The title is wonderful, too...:)....

[Michael Wright]

Thank you much

[Sami Khalil]

Welcome much...:)....