"It was over as quickly as it had begun."

"It was over as quickly as it had begun."

A Story by magic wall tree
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Flash fiction

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It was over as quickly as it had begun.

The two young cowboys drew quickly and fired true. Though one man's shot sounded an instant earlier, they both fell.

Yet, it did not end there, as the legend of the duel surely would, but continued as both clutched at their bleeding bellies and coughed, one man losing composure in death with a shameful cry.


© 2012 magic wall tree



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I like the direction on this, taking the story straight from the suspenseful moment, and indeed you have achieved an intense plot in less than 100 words! well done :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


Nice little bit of flash fiction. Just two points of punctuation here:

"The two young cowboys drew quickly and fired true and though one man's shot sounded an instant earlier, they both fell."
(The two young cowboys drew quickly, and fired true. Though)

"Yet, it did not end there as legend of the duel"
(Yet, it did not end there, as legend)


Posted 5 Years Ago



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Added on December 2, 2011
Last Updated on July 8, 2012
Tags: cowboys, flash fiction, flash, quick

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magic wall tree
magic wall tree

Houston, TX



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I recently started taking writing more seriously (fiction and plays with a little bit of poetry). I am a musician/composer/improviser and I sometimes do visual art. I'm currently exploring how to inco.. more..

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