So

So what if I would rather spend my nights on the couch

listening to thoughts that tell me I am better.

Because maybe I am better than what they always whispered

maybe I am meant to do things that encourage girls to cut their hair

in a style that is goddamn forbidden.

 

I protested not to feel              cool

or to slice eyes in half              like        uncut fruit. 

Not enough to roam with        the         crowd

and too many to say hello to   strangers. 

 

Because are you ever really enough,

are you ever really the bravest of them all

or the only one who stands out in the crowd

when everyone else is standing out with you?

 

I always wanted to be told that I was floating,

know that what I was doing helped people

realize that the black keys of a piano are useful too

and that they all come together to make the same song.

 

So what if I would rather spend my nights on the street

with people I never knew and people who never cared.

So what if I would rather spend my nights in clouded judgement

than wear your tight polo sweater and gush about falseness.

Reviews

[Rico]

This is clean, I really like the format in the second stanza. This feels more powerful the more you read it. The third stanza is my favorite.

[Nyanachi]

Its both enlightening, and critical of well...the 'usual' way people interact with each other in society. :) This poem is unique — good work!

[Ryan Nicole]

"realize that the black keys of a piano are useful too" such a creative and real line, makes me so happy.

[Speakoftherevol]

So this Is really good! Imo, and the poem stands out as very Individualized, yet such a clutched extension of yourself; almost getting the feeling I'm really FEELING YOU SAY THIS. It's very carefree In declaration of (your?) personality but at the same time you really are a "raw" soul of expression here. The awesome creativity In structure and wordplay don't hurt either. So It's right up my alley and I like this. Unique, maybe a bit rough, but amongst all this has deep soul!; please don't ever lose that ability which can't be taught. Keep writing and God bless. -Brandon

[Britt Foster]

This is amazing; there's a lot of feeling embedded in those lines. Always stay true to yourself. We need more of the people who /don't/ gush about falseness.