Compartment 114
Compartment 114
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This life of mine

This life of mine

A Poem by Mandi
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I wrote this for a contest

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This life of mine is so confusing
I can't sleep at night without that feeling.
That feeling of guilt.
I want to do something in this world.
Something to be remembered for.
Something where people will wish to meet me.
No, it is not prideful or selfish of me.
I want to accomplish my dreams
Is that wrong?
This world is coming to an end
And it seems no one is aware but me.
No one cares. They all just go on their
Merry way like nothing's happening.
I dream of the ocean. It flows along
Like nothing's happening
Then a tsunami breaks out and everything
Becomes a disaster.
This is what's going to happen!
And I am prepared and ready.
Are you?

© 2009 Mandi


Author's Note

Mandi
I wrote this and I didn't mean for it to be good, so tell me what you think...do you like that style or of my other poems. express yourself!

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Yeh, i liked that style of your writing as well as your working way. so, true write came from your heart. You didn't have just an aim to drop a piece, you'd an intention to make it beautiful with your scent of words...
Nicely penn'd. It's real and i can apply it even we human can relate this poem to our life. As we're humans' so it's only a feeling of love that binds us to each other. Very true and a sensible write.

keep writing. Beautiful write!

Posted 10 Years Ago


Thank you all for the review and help!

Posted 14 Years Ago


You expressed yourself well in this piece.
Many can relate to that deep and ambitious desire to change the world for the better.
...................
I want to do something in this world.
Something to be remembered for.
...................
Keep this up and you just might...*smile*

Posted 14 Years Ago


This was a very good piece. You have great insight into the world we are living in.

Posted 14 Years Ago


You asked me to choose the one I thought was your best, and I really think this one takes the cake. :)

It was really well written. Other than the few errors that Ben already picked out, I didn't see anything wrong with it.

Great job! :)

Posted 14 Years Ago


Powerful sense of destiny and purpose comes through your words here. I hope your dreams come true. Excellent write!

Posted 14 Years Ago


I agree with the theme of this poem.

The way it is written is great. You challenge the reader to think, always a good thing...

Another very good poem from Mandi!

Posted 14 Years Ago


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Ben
Well, there are a few mistakes. No one is two words, not one, and you spelled tsunami wrong too.

Posted 14 Years Ago



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