THE RACE

THE RACE

A Poem by mandy
"

just a nascar race!

"

The cars are on the track, going round and round,

After a few laps, the "start and parks" cannot be found.

A rookie makes a mistake and he finds the wall,

Nascar steps right up with the first caution call.

 

My driver is passing everyone in his sight,

Looks like he might be celebrating big tonight!

He's running door to door with your favorite guy,

Gives him a one fingered wave just as he rolls on by.

 

They crash and they bash and they rub and they race

The others do their best to just keep pace.

My driver says, "I can win this thing, have no fear."

Just got to keep all these other guys in my rear view mirror!

 

© 2012 mandy


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I can tell you had some fun with this. Next time your at a fair. Drive a bumper car fo fun.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Your rhythm and rhyme keep the roar of engines and the crowd stirring us along! Smiling at the end and hoping for the best!

Posted 11 Years Ago


haha this is wonderful ;) epic write loved it

Posted 11 Years Ago


Nicely done :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


mandy

11 Years Ago

thanks, mark
I liked it because it is not something I'm used to reading about. Took me in to something I scarcely think about. Thought it was great.

Posted 11 Years Ago


mandy

11 Years Ago

thanks..it is just a little nothing ditty imo. lol..i am surprised at the attention it received. i.. read more
Sounds like you love the stockcars. I'm not sure if I loved the poems structure and flow, but that may not matter to you at all. Keep writing and have fun!
Be Well

Posted 11 Years Ago


mandy

11 Years Ago

thank you. as i stated before, this was just a little ditty i threw together fast.
R.I.P Dale Earnhardt

Posted 11 Years Ago


mandy

11 Years Ago

yes indeed! and i would say, go jr, but i am a jeff gordon fan
clever......I'd say more but this damned thing on my Writer's Cafe home page just informed me that I have over 30 read requests and that sort of intimidates me because I don't want to seem like an A*****E or something by taking too long to respond......
good stuff, I enjoyed it much and thank-you for sharing it.
ANF
100/100

Posted 11 Years Ago


mandy

11 Years Ago

thank you
I like your two lines starting crash and bash. I wonder if using shorter lines might create the sense of speed the race gives?

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mandy

11 Years Ago

that might be. i never considered this a serious piece of work, it was thrown together in about 15mi.. read more

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Added on October 7, 2012
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mandy
mandy

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i have lived in michigan and florida. married to a guitar playing man. i enjoy writing poems and songs. also, bowling and card playing..am a big nascar fan, and like hockey. more..

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A Poem by mandy



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