The Cries of URUK

The Brides plea.

 

 

The Cries of Uruk

Dust, dust that almost covered the entire kingdom of Uruk

People, people plea for the Gods to end the painful stroke

The King, the king savors virgin blood with his lord’s rights

New brides, new brides that suffer the pain of King’s lusty nights

Young man, young man agonizing over the King’s mighty games

Death, death and wounds that brought the kingdom more flames

Oh hear us, oh hear us, Oh Gods hear our cries.

Let the King realize our tears, our souls, and our wounds

Let the King stop this retribution and hide us from the endless hounds

Our dreams were shattered,

Our bodies relentlessly battered,

Oh hear us, Oh hear us, Oh Gods hear our cries.

4/28/2013 Marc Marlon Villaflor

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

URUK is an ancient Kingdom (Now a modern day Iraq) ruled by King Gilgamesh a dime-god.

Reviews

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A rallying poem that charges off the page in its mystique and telling of the tale of this ancient city.

A couple of small suggestions:

New brides, new brides that suffer the pain of the King’s lusty nights
Young man, young man agonizing over the King’s mighty games
Let the King realize our tears, our souls and our wounds
Our dream was shattered,
or our dreams were shattered.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Wow, lol I oversight those "s" thanks Mr. John you are always here to support me. Thank you. :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

You are welcome Marc, another enjoyable poem you have given us.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks again Mr. John :)

[Eddie Phillips]

Unique and well done like always my brother.

[Gerald Parker]

This is beyond my limited expertise.

[Veronica Chandler]

Wow, this piece does the Epic of Gilgamesh great justice, and is such a fitting tribute to the ancient story. Brilliant write!

[InsanityWriter]

I love the way you wrote this! It sounds like a chant from ancient times... Great work. :)

[minisla]

Loved it

[Ina Waltz]

This poem reminded me of Lord of the ring (visually, when I closed my eyes and pictured the atmosphere) and then I saw the video- it all fell into the right place. Quite enjoyed it!

[SHEEMA HUQ]

I found this ancient piece quite eerie, though compassionately composed and enjoyed, very well done Marc

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Sheema :) glad you like this piece.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Nice one, just read your message reply by the way, thanks, see you around Chuck :)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

:) you too

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A piece that relates tot he cries of all humans to thier gods and times gone by, well done, good read.

[Dakshta]

That was amazing, just beautiful :)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Who's james? lol thanks for the reads

[Dakshta]

oh so sorry for that, typo mistake :)

[Ravyne Hawke]

I love ancient Uruk and the whole Gilgamesh story! I think you have brought it to light beautifully in this poem, even in revealing the horrors that occurred in ancient times. The next to the last line.. do you mean a multitude of "bodies" or a singular "body" in mass? I think with the plural "Our", "bodies" sounds better. Great job here, Marc. I really enjoyed the imagery and flow of this piece.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Lori :)