Zoo Train

Read in 4/4 time. Feel the tracks.

Tick tack

tick tack

the train

goes down the track

 

Click clack

click clack

file in

and walk back

 

Who do

who do

you see

on this choo choo

 

Two blue

Coo Coo

fly in

and land on you

 

Boo hoo

boo hoo

a baby cries

from losing a shoe

 

You grew

blue too

then a child

smiled at you

 

Woo hoo

woo hoo

the next stop

is the zoo

 

Blue Zoo

with Coo Coo

exit left

for lots to do

 

Tick tack

tick tack

the train returns

down the track

Author's Note

Could you feel the tracks?

Reviews

[Lorry]

Okay, I admit one part of this puzzled me for a full five minutes, before my head caught up, but im still laughing at my own mistake at thinking everyone spoke Scottish and thought "have they got flying cows in GA?
We call cow, coo here...which would make a haiku, a cow in a penthouse :)
Cleverly done, to fit so much into a choo choo choo choo rhythm. :)

[Margie F]

Lorry, you can always make me laugh out loud! That was quite a funny picture. We do have the nursery rhyme about a cow that jumped over the moon. ;) Isn't language funny? How a simple 3 letter word can mean so many different things? Thank you so much for the compliment. I enjoyed writing it.

[andrew mitchell]

Pardon me girl! Is that the cat that chewed your new shoes! yeah yeah! I'm positive that was the Glen Miller song!:) Clever and fun writing!

[Margie F]

LOL, funny Andrew. Thank you so much. I had fun writing it.

[Coyote Poetry]

Nice flow of thoughts. I could see the tracks and the train moving. Wonderful use of words dear Margie.
Coyote

[Margie F]

Yay! Exactly what I was going for. It is great when others feel what you are trying to communicate.

[Coyote Poetry]

You did well Margie. The words move with perfection.

[john l smith]

no boo hoo for this little choo choo, and to to the zoo zoo too too
No ballyhoo from this guyaroo
Very cute
Dave B

[Margie F]

Thank you for the smile this morning and the feedback.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

not only did i feel the tracks...i felt excited about getting to the zoo...
and the rhythm, like an old locomotive...the sound of the onomatopoeia used...choo choo coo coo...
life gets hard sometimes, but there are events and people who make it better...
and at one time or another we all need to be "the little engine that could"---

[Margie F]

Thank you J/E. This was written as a challenge from a friend. I'm always trying to think of something he won't be expecting from me. I think I end up surprising myself more than I do him. :)

[Onlyme]

I enjoyed this a whole lot, make me smile, think and ponder. :)

[Margie F]

Thank you for the review. I like to make people think and ponder. :)

[Tony]

Nice use of onomatopoeia.

One flew over the Zoo Train Tracks! hahahahaaa

[Margie F]

I'm sorry I didn't see your review until today. For some reason it didn't show up until today. Strange. Thank you for your review. By the way, I LOVE your profile picture.

[Tony]

it's all good, I dig your work👍

[Margie F]

Thank you so much.