A Lovers  Embrace

A Lovers Embrace

A Poem by Maria Fischinger

                                A Lovers  Embrace

                     Thousand of tongues gliding over the skin

                         Hands reading every peek and valley,

                            lovers embraced stroking the body

                                   and relaxing the soul.

                  Waves of white foam forming and breaking.

                                           ……………………………

                          Thank God for a working Jacuzzi!


© 2008 Maria Fischinger



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I like the double entendres you use in the poem. I think that it is a solid piece that speaks well. I would take a look at lines one and three though. I would change "gliding" to glide in line one, "reading" to read in line two, and "embraced" to embrace in line three. This would help the flow and agreement I think. A coma may fit between embrace and stroking line line three is well. Overall this is an enjoyable read. Thank you for sharing.

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Maria Fischinger
Maria Fischinger

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