hand of encouragment

hand of encouragment

A Poem by marilyn 1225
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just a little thank you poem for the fun of it

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there was a kind man in the sand
he surfaced for air--  breathed in and breathed out
till  he found someone in need to give a kind hand

how compassionate   yes
how helpful  of course

and because of his hand
a bright multi colored
giant pink 
rose grew
 and grew in that sand
flourished  with the magic potion

soaking  up the ocean

and offered that man
love on demand
poems galore    
roses
  and 
a spirit     free to soar. 

mariliyn nepp sturner dec 26 2017


© 2017 marilyn 1225



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Since there are hundreds of similar love poems posted here, I'm always over the moon when I find one that's original & unexpected. Your "man in the sand" seems to be a twist on the mermaid idea . . . & it is again a surprise when a rose is planted in beach sand (unlikely, but that's what makes the reader ponder, when things aren't painted as we might expect). I also like the way you play with a certain word sound here & there, with an uneven mix of end rhymes and internal rhymes. Since I'm a pretty regimented writer, I learn a lot when I read someone with a more uninhibited style like yours! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 6 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

marilyn 1225

3 Days Ago

Margie i wish i could be disciplined.. not my nature ever sadly uninhibited yes lol s.. read more



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Since there are hundreds of similar love poems posted here, I'm always over the moon when I find one that's original & unexpected. Your "man in the sand" seems to be a twist on the mermaid idea . . . & it is again a surprise when a rose is planted in beach sand (unlikely, but that's what makes the reader ponder, when things aren't painted as we might expect). I also like the way you play with a certain word sound here & there, with an uneven mix of end rhymes and internal rhymes. Since I'm a pretty regimented writer, I learn a lot when I read someone with a more uninhibited style like yours! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 6 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

marilyn 1225

3 Days Ago

Margie i wish i could be disciplined.. not my nature ever sadly uninhibited yes lol s.. read more
I love this, I love the kindness I feel through it, the serenity, the soothing tune and flow, very well done my friend, Your heart shines here, Thank You*

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

marilyn 1225

3 Weeks Ago

light your review is better than my poem thank you for writing such sweet sentences for me to.. read more
Light

3 Weeks Ago

Your poem was written so tenderly and from a sincere pure heart, my pleasure that I've left You a li.. read more

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was a teacher for years, love books, love art work and swimming I live in NJersey and write free style poems not always with rhyme my friend Dara recommended this site more..

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