But, you do

But, you do

A Poem by Marissa

You may not know it,
But, you've helped me believe.

You may not know it, 
But, you've showed me love.

You may not know it, 
But, you're the reason I still try.

You may not know it, 
But, you've taught me so much.

You may not know it, 
But, you make feel like I'm enough.

You may not know it, 
But, I need you.

You may not know it, 
But, I'm thankful for you.

You may not know it, 
But, I love you like a mom.

Now, I hope you know,
Everything you may not have known before.



© 2012 Marissa



Author's Note

Marissa
sucky, but it's for this other woman I know who is like a second mom to me...Should I show it to her??

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I don't know why you think this is sucky. It's really good and I could almost sing it because it flows so well.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Marissa

4 Years Ago

Thank you! I'm so glad you like it...would love more reviews on my other work. Please. (:
lovely sentiment. very nicely penned...suggestion: instead of beginning every thought with the same line, why not begin with "you may not know it" and then remove the couplet format and list each thought she may not know, one after another...repetition can be very effective as a tool but in this case i fear it is too much and swallows your message. inother words, only put in "you may not know it" once..at the beginning..try it and see what you think of the results. i am happy to read and review your work,but remember we all want equal attention. this is what i meant by "quid pro quo"...it is Latin...look it up on google

Posted 4 Years Ago


Marissa

4 Years Ago

Thank you! And I would change it,but the way I wrote it was for a purpose you may not understand, bu.. read more
quinfinn

4 Years Ago

i respect your reasons for maintaining the integrity of your work and yes, that is what i meant....
Marissa

4 Years Ago

Alright thank you!
I would like to read a poem that was written for me!!! She must be great!
Good write!

Posted 4 Years Ago


Marissa

4 Years Ago

Thank you! And she loved it...glad I showed it to her. (:
goodness, yes show her, this is beautiful!

Posted 4 Years Ago


Marissa

4 Years Ago

Thank you! I have showed her she loved it...thanks for your review (:
all I can say it, you should show it to her. I'm sure she'll love this little outpour of emotions for her.
A cute write :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


Marissa

4 Years Ago

Thank you! And I am going to some time.
yes, it will warm her heart. We need to tell people how much they mean to us while we have the chance. You may consider framing it and giving it to her as a Christmas present....she would love that.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Marissa

4 Years Ago

yeah that a great idea thanks (:
A fine tribute, written with style and a lot of feeling - fine job.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Marissa

4 Years Ago

Thank you! (:
You should most certainly show it her, these are the kinds of things we hold close to our hearts.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Marissa

5 Years Ago

Thank you...glad you think I should show her.
yes yes yes.... only get your 'you'r and 'you're' right LOL Seriously, wouldn't you want to know? I live for those moments when I've made enough of a positive impression on someone that it improves the day for them; this lady obviously has left a longer lasting impression than that so tell her!

Posted 5 Years Ago


Marissa

5 Years Ago

Lol I will be fixing those in just a second haha and what you mean wouldn't I want to know? And I wi.. read more
Mark

5 Years Ago

I mean if someone really looked up to you, wouldn't you want them to tell you?
Marissa

5 Years Ago

Oh okay I thought that's what you meant, but wasn't positive. And yes I would great point.
Of course you should! It's beautiful and she'd love it. Even if it isn't the most poetically advanced thing you've ever written, it's well-written and heartwarming. A very sweet thing to give to someone you love.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Marissa

5 Years Ago

thank you! and I will show her. (:

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Hi! Im Marissa I like writing poems and im not very good but it's how I get my feelings out. I'm a sophomore. Nothing better than friends and family. (but to me family isn't always blood) and well I l.. more..

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