I Love

I Love

A Poem by Marissa

I love that you are here for me,
Even when you don't have to be.

I love that you push me,
Even though I hate it at the time.

I love that you worry about me,
Even when I don't understand why.

I love that you call me yours,
Even if people don't like it.

I love that you fuss at me for stuff you would do,
Even though that makes no sense at all.

I love that no matter what I say or do you still love me,
Even though you get really upset with me at times.

I love that you believe in me,
Like no one else has before.

I love that I can make you proud,
Without feeling like I will let you down.

I love that you don't give up on me,
Like so many already have.

And most of all I love that you love me,
Like I'm your own precious jewel. 




© 2013 Marissa



Author's Note

Marissa
This is for a woman who has stood by me for almost 4 years as a Mom. She isn't my mom or step mom, but she is definitely it my book a mom to me. She hasn't given up on me when I've failed so many times and I wrote this a couple weeks ago and have just been carrying it around debating on whether I should give it to her or not...So, as you review my poem let me know if I should show her and what you think a good way to do it would be...I would really appreciate any advice. Thanks in advanced guys! (:

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I think that this was really sweet. You tried to show your feelings through these words and that's wonderful. I would maybe add a little more description...or maybe give examples. Nicely done though

Posted 4 Years Ago


Marissa

4 Years Ago

Thank you! I'll definitely try that and see what I can do thanks.(:
This is a beautiful way to show your feelings to your Mom friend! Believe me, she will appreciate getting this from you. However, before you give it to her, correct the spelling in the fifth stanza, second line, the word should be spelled sense, not since. I would get a little keepsake box and put the poem inside of it and give it to her that way.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Marissa

4 Years Ago

Thank you I meant to fix that, and thanks that's a good idea.
First of all, you get a lot right, nice couplets, real and honest content written with emotion, so a good write. Perhaps less use of I would help, maybe more details to make it even more real..a good job.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Marissa

4 Years Ago

Thank you! That's for the advice and saying it's a good job. The reason I used I a lot was because I.. read more
Amazing, a beautiful piece :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


Marissa

4 Years Ago

Thank You!
5th stanza, 'since' should be sense

Posted 4 Years Ago


Marissa

4 Years Ago

Oh, thank you!
A beautiful poem for love. I enjoyed the description in the poem. Thank you for sharing the amazing poem of love.
Coyote

Posted 4 Years Ago


Marissa

4 Years Ago

Thank you!! Glad you liked it(:
Yes give it to her. Proofread it first though. Caught at least one typo.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Marissa

4 Years Ago

Thank you I think I will...and what is the typo I have went over it and haven't seen one
This is awesome, I am sure she would be very happy and honored to read this tribute to her. Go for it!!!

Posted 4 Years Ago


Marissa

4 Years Ago

Thank you!
and i love how you have penned this poem...

Posted 4 Years Ago


Marissa

4 Years Ago

did you also like the poem?
khalid

4 Years Ago

sure i did!

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Hi! Im Marissa I like writing poems and im not very good but it's how I get my feelings out. I'm a sophomore. Nothing better than friends and family. (but to me family isn't always blood) and well I l.. more..

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