Five Minutes In Hell

Five Minutes In Hell

A Poem by Mark
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I rarely write specifically for a contest, but this one intrigued me...AND I realized I'd never processed my feelings about the b***h that turned my life inside-out!

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FIVE MINUTES IN HELL

 

Toward Lake Pontchartrain I roll,

Toward my former home, I stroll

What’s this? A cop

Asks me to stop;

I.D.’d, then on my way…

 

Like none I’ve ever seen, the mess

It leaves my heart in sore distress

The door, in hall,

Engrossed with all

The stuff I used to play.

 

LP’s, a thousand; videos, too

Now Giz, I guess, it’s just me and you--

A ton of stuff,

Was never enough

From my mud-bound arena!

 

I swear I’ve never seen a

More horrific sight, nor meaner

Than what met my eye

The day that I

Bade adieu to that b***h, Katrina!

 

Mark Teague

3-19-09


© 2009 Mark



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You so well describe the devastation and horrific pillaging performed by mother nature aka Katrina. I watched this on television and my heart ached for so many who lost their lives and those that lost loved ones. Great sorry was felt for all who lost their worldly goods to this catastrophe. How terrible to lose all your pliable memories to this wrath. But you will always retain those special moments photographed in the mind. I see one good thing came out of this devastation and she is standing beside you in the picture. You make an absolutely beautiful couple. Mother nature took a lot away from you, but look what you gained in the end. You are a very skilled poet. It flowed and carried a converstion with the reader. Rhymn, it rhymned! That I really appreciate.

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The words are hard to find for such a sad event but you put it all into a heartfelt poem!

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the rhyme has a nice, easy flow here. congrats on the contest win. Z

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Congrats!! Mark~ a great 5 minute write,Way To Go my friend!!

Posted 8 Years Ago


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Congratulations on winning the Five-Minute contest!

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Dear Mark
A great write, I had to read it more then once, why you ask? the honesty and emotions in the piece, true words are precious my friend. Thanks for sharing. God Bless you.
Hugs....Annie

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Dear Mark,

A powerful peace. A bit personal with insights we're not privy too, nontheless, your emotions come through very effectively.

Very best regards,

Rick

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Your style is unique. I almost didn't read this, but am glad that I did. Cool writing. :)

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