The blade

My only way of comfort

is with a tiny piece of metal

leaveing marks on my skin

makes me realize that im still here

 

Nobody bothers to notice

the blood stains on my seleve

It felt so cold and comfoting

when the blade dug through my skin

 

I just want to go

Never held back

let me do the final cut

and let me be free

 

Nobody would care if i was gone

but 1 or 2 people

it will be easier for them

if i was gone

 

I sometimes wonder

if people accually care

or if they feel sorry

or want me dead

 

This is a true tale

of how i feel

when the piece of metal

is digging into my skin

 

Sometimes

I wnat

to end it all

...

..

.

 

 

Reviews

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

Wow!! This is soo dark, deep, and scary! Cutting seems to be the answer to a lot of people, but it really doesn't help. Since it just leaves scars that will stay there forever to remind you everyday of a mistake. I understand that people do it to relieve their stress. I hope that you still don't feel this way, because it's sad to want to end your life. Great job on expressing your emotions! I found a few minor mistakes. But I know there's someone that truly cares if you were gone! If you ever need someone to talk to or pull you away from ending your life, there's always God. :)

*Leaveing* --leaving
*Seleve*--sleeve
*Comfoting*--comforting
*accually*-Actually
*wnat*--want

Ashley Rivers-- Dream BIG and you'll win BIG:)

[MusicLover]

I was too depressed to care about spelling. It adds to the affect that she is soooo depressed that she doesnt care about what she loves

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

Yeah, it makes sense! You don't have to change it, if you don't want to.

[MusicLover]

Im not. It shows that sometinmes people get so depressed that they do not even care about the thing that shapes their life. So they just type and see what happens.

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

Yeah, I know what you mean! But I'm the type of person that goes crazy if I misspell anything. Haha.

[Me]

This read keeps the attention by deep introspection. Well crafted

[Crystal Marie Dreier]

Wow, this gave me chills cause thats exactly how I have felt!! Great job hun!

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

I can see from other reviews about the spelling, but the fact that you are keeping the spelling does have a symbolic meaning which is unique and nice, it does show the raw and real feeling in this poem even more. I really like this poem, so much sad and painful emotion. This is so relatable... to many people, and I agree with the other reviews, there are so many people out there that do care as well as family and friends who should care as well. Really good write for emotion.

[Craba]

deep write and emotional

[TPK Stories]

I've had these feelings...can relate to this...feel the pain...such emotion....

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

the first two stanzas are my favorite- this is the first time i've actually seen someone compare cutting to a form of comfort

...and i always did wonder how cutting can make one feel one whole, or complete, or feel alive again- that's what most cutters admit to feeling and thinking

but i hope you feel better though- i've heard stories of cutters/suicidal people stop trying to kill themselves, and those people gradually feel better within time...

[G!o]

I don't know if WOW is the right expression but i guess i should first say, i am really sorry about this feeling that you went through...this has been like the kingdom that i live in so i am totally familiar with this. Okay to literature now this is lovely and i adore how you fade with the stanzas, very artistic. This is an amazing piece, you should check out some of my pieces . You got it going on.

[Pax]

don't be like that, i'm sure there is always someone who cares.
like us your WC friends.
this poem shows a dark emotion wants to come out..
nicely expressed!

[MusicLover]

thank you. My heart was broken but now it is fixed...sort of

[Pax]

every broken heart is an experience to learned from. and there will always someone who will pick up the pieces and brought it all together to be fixed and new again.

[MusicLover]

yeah..thanks willyam

[MusicLover]

I was too depressed to care about spelling. It adds to the affect that she is soooo depressed that she doesnt care about what she loves

that is why the mistakes are there